Talk:Kevin King (American football)

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A fact from Kevin King (American football) appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 16 February 2018 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that Green Bay Packers cornerback Kevin King played most of his first season with an injury to his shoulder which dislocated several times and left him unable to lift his arm over his head?

A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2018/February. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/Kevin King (American football).

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 09:20, 27 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this one, will post review soon. Kosack (talk) 09:20, 27 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

I would expect a longer opening for a GA, another paragraph would be nice. Perhaps mention his All-Pac-12 mentions in college and some information on his debut NFL season. Done
Ref 1 lists his full name as Kevin Charles King. Done

Early life

"baseball, football, and basketball" I would swap football and basketball around as the article then mentions a desire to play football positions straight after.' Done
Include his height at the time of the quarterback mention for a point of reference for the reader (5' 7 according to the source). Done
"he had hit a growth spurt and grown to 6'2." I'm not sure that sentence works, perhaps ""he experienced a growth spurt and grew"? Done
Link MVP to Most valuable player. Done
When I searched for Max Preps, I was redirected to CBS. Might be worth linking that as it is mentioned in the article. Done I wasn't aware that they owned them, but I know it's one of the main high school recruiting websites.--Church ^Talk 08:05, 1 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Link track and field. Done
Link Rivals.com. Done
"Washington, California, West Virginia, and Arizona State" I'm assuming these are all universities, if so, link them to their relevant pages. Done With the exception of Washington because it was linked earlier in the lead. --Church ^Talk 08:06, 1 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"ranked as a three star prospect by Rivals.com", a bit of clarification is needed here, is three star good? Perhaps adding "out of a possible five" or " the highest ranking available" Done
Ref 1 states that his cousin is Asa Jackson and that he majored in American ethnic studies and retail management, this could be worked into the text. Done I added his major, but I'm not sure how to include his relationship with Asa Jackson, do you have a suggestion?--Church ^Talk 22:53, 1 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

College career

"although the team believed him to more natural at cornerback" insert be between to and more. Done
When I searched true freshman, I was redirected to Redshirt (college sports). I'm not great with college football jargon, would this be an appropriate link in your opinion?

I went ahead and linked it. A true freshman is someone who did not receive a redshirt designation (meaning they are an actual first year to the school, whereas if they were a "redshirt" freshman they would be a second year or sophomore at the school.--Church ^Talk 22:56, 1 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Again, link BYU, UCLA Bruins, Stanford, Illinois and Oklahoma State to relevant team pages. Done
Link Apple Cup, Jimmy Lake and Manny Wilkins Done.
"King recorded the first interception of the year in the Apple Cup", the source states that this was his first career interception which should be emphasized. Perhaps, "King recorded his first career interception in the Apple Cup..."? Done
Ref 5 is the only ref used in the second paragraph so doesn't need to be repeated for every sentence. Done

Professional career

Link Lance Zierlein. Done
That repeated in third sentence of first paragraph. Done
Link NFL combine to NFL Scouting Combine. Done
Ref 2 used three times in three sentences, the middle use could be dropped. Done

After measurables table

Link NFL Draft to 2017 NFL Draft. Done
"He did not end up waiting for long", seems a bit journalistic I think. I would remove it and just keep the mention of the Packers trading back to get him. Done
Add a mention of who Mike Mayock is. Done
Link Joe Whitt to Joe Whitt Jr.. Done
Link Skype. Done
Link jammer to Jammer (American football). Done
Move ref 19 to the bottom of the paragraph otherwise the last sentence looks unsourced. Done
""King tried for most of the season to tough it out", tough it out seems too sports reporter-like. Perhaps play through the pain? Done
"he would have to have surgery for his injury." I'm not keen on the use of have to have, perhaps "he would be forced to undergo surgery"? Done
Link Brian Gutekunst. Done

Career statistics

Seems unnecessary to have the regular season sub-heading if there's nothing else in the section. I would either remove it or drop it down from a sub-heading to simply bold text. Done

References

Most references have author's last name first but refs 12 and 13 have forename first. Stick to one style for consistency. Done
Ref 17, author surname Mcginn > McGinn. Done
The external link is used as a reference so I don't think it's needed. Done

Overall, not far off, mainly needs more links added. With only one pro season under his belt, I don't think much more can be expected length wise. A nice job. Kosack (talk) 13:09, 27 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Kosack I'm currently experiencing some medical issues. I appreciate you taking the time to review this for me and I'm excited to be this close! I will hopefully be able to begin fixing the things listed in the next day or so. --Church ^Talk 15:44, 27 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Church: Sorry to hear that, reviews are generally placed on hold for at least seven days and even then it can be extended so there's no rush if you have real life issues to deal with. Kosack (talk) 16:40, 27 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Kosack I think I got everything knocked out. Let me know what you think, apologies for the delay. --Church ^Talk 23:26, 1 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Church: No need to apologise, work was done very promptly. Meets the relevant criteria, promoting to GA status. Kosack (talk) 07:09, 2 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack: Thank you so much, my first GA!--Church ^Talk 20:13, 2 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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For the "2021" section, I recommend adding this: In Week 2 against the Detroit Lions, King struggled as he gave up a 46-yard pass from Jared Goff to Quintez Cephus. During the game, he was benched for Eric Stokes. [1] 2603:6010:D307:98CA:599B:A04:A180:BA53 (talk) 17:50, 25 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Not done: per WP:NOTDIARY. Not every game played is worthy of notice in an encyclopedia. Sportsmen having bad (or good) days is entirely run-of-the-mill RandomCanadian (talk / contribs) 04:11, 1 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]