Talk:Kendrick Lamar/GA1

GA Review

Passed. 750h+ | Talk 14:23, 13 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 02:46, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi DiaMali, I will be reviewing. I see you're the main contributor of the page, contributing to over 75 per cent of it. I'll be starting soon. 750h+ (talk) 02:46, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
Is it verifiable with no original research?
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:

C. It contains no original research:

D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
Is it neutral?
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

This is a nice article, just some prose concerns just need to be adressed;

In the Early life section, it says "Both of his parents are African Americans from the South Side of Chicago;[3] they relocated to Compton in 1984, when they were teenagers, due to his father's affiliation with the Gangster Disciples." Consider splitting into two sentence, like "Both of his parents are African Americans from the South Side of Chicago.[3] When they were teenagers, they relocated to Compton in 1984, due to his father's affiliation with the Gangster Disciples." 750h+ (talk) 02:56, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Minor grammatical error in the Early life section: "Lamar and his family lived in Section 8 housing, was reliant on welfare and food stamps, and experienced homelessness." was should be changed to were. 750h+ (talk) 02:59, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Where it says "It done something to me right then and there", change that to "It done [sic] something to me right then and there", since that is what he quoted, but it is grammatically incorrect. 750h+ (talk) 03:05, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"Inge played a vital role in his intellectual growth, often critiquing his lexicon and suggesting prompts to strengthen his prose." What is Inge? 750h+ (talk) 03:08, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Link gang war. 750h+ (talk) 03:10, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The rest of the article's prose is good. Address my above concerns and I will mark the prose as good.
Hello! Just addressed all of your prose concerns. DiaMali (talk) 13:25, 13 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Well done. 750h+ | Talk 14:17, 13 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

References

Reference number 2, (Young, David (2018). Kendrick Lamar: A Biography. CreateSpace. ISBN 978-1985760677.) which page? you can replace the source if you can't access it. 750h+ (talk) 03:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
What makes DJBooth, Lakers Nation and HipHopDX reliable sources? 750h+ (talk) 03:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Source spotcheck completed on three sources--done 750h+ (talk) 03:34, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I removed the first reference because it felt fan-made and not from a reliable source. DJBooth and HipHopDX are both publications that focus on hip hop music and culture. HipHopDX is actually a subsidiary outlet of Warner Music Group. I used a DJBooth article to support the "spiritually unsatisfied" remark in the Early life section because the source is a letter the subject wrote to the publication in response to a previous article where they examined how he infuses his religion in his works. I can remove the Lakers Nation reference, though. DiaMali (talk) 13:22, 13 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
So the sources for now are fine. Further work may be needed if you do consider taking this to featured article candidacy. Passing sources 750h+ | Talk 14:19, 13 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

Address my above concerns and I'll be happy to pass the article as good.
Article is good and exemplifies the basic needs of a good article on Wikipedia. Passing.

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