Talk:Kawasaki Heavy Industries C151/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 14:19, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Alright I will be picking up the review of this one - both for the Wiki Cup and the GA cup as well. I will be making my review comments over the next couple of days.

Side note, I would love some input on a Featured List candidate (Mexican National Light Heavyweight Championship) and a Featured Article candidate (CMLL World Heavyweight Championship). I am not asking for Quid pro Quo, but all help is appreciated.  MPJ-US  14:19, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

GA Toolbox

I like to get this checked out first, I have found issues using this that has led to quick fails so it's important this passes muster.

Peer review tool

• Article size is about 33k, per WP:LEAD that should have 2-3 paragraphs in the lead, with a GA I would expect 3.
  • Made it three now. - Mailer Diablo 00:20, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Copyright violations Tool

• 0.0% - probably because most of the sources are in Japanese Y

Disambiguation links

• No issues detected Y

External links

• The link to mitsui.co.jp in reference 3 is dead.
  • Fixed. - Mailer Diablo 00:20, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Well Written

• "There are nine seats between two doors;" - moments later it stated it was reduced to 7 - so nine seats should be past tense.
• "rolling stock and Mitsubishi Electric propulsion equipment was constructed" two subjects, should be "were constructed".
• "darker-coloured" should be "darker coloured"
  • I rewrote this a little because the seats have no fabric. - Mailer Diablo 00:20, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
• "The colour of seats in the driving trailer were changed" should be "was changed" since it refers to the color, not the seats and thus is singular.
• "de-commissioned" should be "decommissioned"
• "both set 301 and 302 is used" should be "are used"
• " entirely with adhesive" - they covered with glue? I am not sure that's the right term, I would guess it's basically giant stickers right?
• "giving a livery that" - how about "creating a livery that"?
  • Turns out better than I had expected, I suppose the peer review helped. All listed suggestions adopted. - Mailer Diablo 00:20, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Broad in coverage

• There is a 20 year gap in the history from delivery to refurbishment - Nothing at all on this period of time? I know it was probably relatively uneventful but they were in use right? Could we get something on the usage of those 20 years?
  • There were no major works between first delivery and the first refurbishment. However, there are minor events made along the way but they are classified under "Operational details" (1994, 1997, 1999). The major incident in 1993 was listed under "Major incidents", and it was the result of an external factor (oil spill). - Mailer Diablo 00:20, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Neutral

• The sentence "The incident caused a public outcry not seen since Michael P. Fay's caning;" is not covered by the sources and without attribution can appear to be a personal opinion, especially the "outcry not seen since" comparison.
  • Removed. - Mailer Diablo 00:20, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
• Othern than the comment above it seems to be neutral, factual.

Sources/verifiable

• What sort of rerefence is #21? it just has a title and a date - is it a book? Article?? either way it needs more info to identify it better.
  • It is a book. I've integrated the bottom reference into the reference itself. - Mailer Diablo 00:20, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
• Is it possible to get page indicators for the newspaper articles?
  • I've ran through every entry through my databases again, I've included page numbers where the two main newspaper databases is willing to provide me. Where it is not present, neither database included this information. - Mailer Diablo 00:20, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
• Is the reference at the bottom, without a number, actually used in the article or more of a "read more" type of thing?
  • Relates to the first question. - Mailer Diablo 00:20, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Stable

• I am not seeing any edit warring in the last year or so of edit history Y

Illustrated / Images

• All looks good, appropriate for the article and corrctly licensed. Y

• @Mailer Diablo: - I have completed my review so far, since I have a few things that need to be addressed i am putting this on hold for at least 7 days to allow updates to take place.  MPJ-US  19:53, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

• Thank you. Working on it now. - Mailer Diablo 23:13, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

• Hi MPJ-DK. Thanks for taking the time to review the article. Much appreciated! Above are my responses to your feedback. Please let me know on my talkpage if there is anything further that needs to be fixed. My schedule is not doing me a favour, but after mid-April if I have some extra time I will definitely take a look at your candidates. - Mailer Diablo 00:20, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

• Well that was a quick turnaround @Mailer diablo:. I am going to pass it, great work.  MPJ-US  05:03, 27 March 2016 (UTC)