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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 05:58, 20 February 2017 (UTC)
Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 05:58, 20 February 2017 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox;
- Karl Wilhelm von Dieskau, (9 August 1701 in Kontoppe, part of the Prussian Neumark–14 August 1777 in Berlin); just the date range is enough, no need of geographical details done
- Link lieutenant general done
- Why "a campaign in Hungary" is separately mentioned? done
- Section 1;
- Period of his father, (16727–1762) is unnecessary, it is out of context I left his dates in
adaughter of I struck out "a" but it changes the meaning. And the German was specific that she was a daughter, not the only daughter.- General Field Marshal? Is he a general or field marshal? Both of them are two different ranks, or it is a special case? Anyway, link whatever it is. fixed.
- Section 2;
- Dieskau entered the Prussian military -> Dieskau joined the Prussian military done
- Link bombardier done
- Comma (,) after "On 12 April 1727" done
- he was raised to second lieutenant; I suggest "promoted" over "raised" done
- Dieskau's military career modeled that of other Junker sons. military career modeled that of other Junker sons; recheck the use of punctuation removed
- The context on Junkers is a bit out of context, cut it down removed
- Section 2.1;
- Not only were there not enough guns, but "also" their quality was poor done
- This made the gun unreliable -> This made their guns unreliable done
- Field Marshal Samuel von Schmettau done
- What is "number artillery"? No. of units, the men, the guns or what? Make it clearer done
- at which time the king had given him a magnificent tobacco pot -> and also the king had given him a magnificent tobacco pot at the same time done
- Dieskau was appointed Lieutenant-Colonel -> Dieskau was promoted lieutenant colonel on; it is a rank not a position, one gets promoted not appointed done
- 20 April 20 1755; check this done
- and on 28 February 1757,[5] finally colonel -> colonel on 28 February 1757
- Link major general and lieutenant general done
- 3‐pound gun; check this correct done yes it is
- Nothing about the Equestrian statue of Frederick the Great and Frederick the Great's vaunted artillery is mentioned in the prose. But it is in the lead, fix this. done
- 0% confidence, well done.
- No need to red link the writers in the sources if the articles are not there done
- Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 10:58, 4 March 2017 (UTC)
- thank you! auntieruth (talk) 20:38, 6 March 2017 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 14:37, 8 March 2017 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail: