Talk:Karl Thielscher

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Review: October 30, 2024. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review

Passed. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 21:40, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

This review is transcluded from Talk:Karl Thielscher/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 02:54, 26 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 04:00, 26 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Add period after Dartmouth in lead.
- Done.
Lead needs expanded.
Any source for Barney being his nickname?
- Added to body with a source.
Any source for "Sr."
- I based it on his son being Karl Jr., but I'm not finding any sources saying he's Karl Sr.... removed for now.
Add "Karl Leavitt Thielscher" to the body since that was his birth name.
- Done.
New high school infobox formatting.
- Done.
His PFA profile says he was with Dartmouth from 1913 to 1916 and was a three-year letterman. Add that to the body and infobox.
- Added.
Added cats: Baseball players from Massachusetts, American military personnel of World War I, National Football League officials
Added commonscatinline.
Link team captain in early life.
- Done.
"returning to his alma mater as an assistant coach" what sports?
- Clarified.
Need to add coaching cats
is there a link for Aviation Corps?
- Hmm... I'm not sure. Would Aviation Corps be the Air Force?
"Thielscher was given the rank of lieutenant." No source
- Moved around and added a source.
Is there a link for Camp Robinson?
- Four newspaper matches for "thielscher camp robinson" (1) but none specify the place. I see several Camp Robinsons at Camp Robinson – not sure if it was one of those or which one it was...
That note needs sources.
- Added a ref.
link fair catch.
- Done.
"After APFA official Eugene W. Garson was severely injured in a Buffalo All-Americans game" The heck? That's gonna need some details, lol.
"He officiated their game against the Columbus Panhandles, a 38–0 win for the All-Americans." No source.
- Added some details about his APFA officiating.
"In 1923, Thielscher returned to his alma mater of Dartmouth College to assist the coaching staff" What sports?
- Clarified.
"both of which" shouldn't that say "both of whom"?
- Done.
"couple had two sons, Karl Jr., and David, both of which played college football at Dartmouth College." Remove College and just put Dartmouth, Dartmouth College was already spelled out two sentences before.
- Done.
"Madison Avenue Presbyterian Church" looks like there is a link for that (Madison Avenue Presbyterian Church)
- Done.

Nice research again. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 04:15, 26 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: BeanieFan11 (talk) 20:06, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I think you forgot to expand the lead. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 20:36, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@WikiOriginal-9: – oops, did that now. BeanieFan11 (talk) 20:41, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"began serving as an official" football official. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 21:07, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done. BeanieFan11 (talk) 21:09, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
In Early life and military career: "returning to his alma mater as an assistant football coach" Is that high school or Dartmouth? Everything else is good now. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 21:16, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Clarified Dartmouth. BeanieFan11 (talk) 21:19, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I did a spot check of sources and did not find any more issues. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 19:58, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.