Talk:Karam Singh/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 02:01, 26 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This article is looking good, but I have a few comments/queries:

suggest using {{postnominals}}
- PVC cannot be mentioned using this template, so to maintain consistency, I would not suggest this.
should be 1st Battalion as it is the title of a unit (and follow with 1 SIKH in parentheses)
- Done.
is the citation for his MM available, it would be a good addition?
- I am sorry that the citation is not available.
there is a missing bit, how he remained in the Indian Army after WWII
- There isn't much gap between WWII and War of 1947.
There is no context for the capture of Tithwal. Where is it, in terms of the regions of India? Jammu and Kashmir? and why was it being fought over? I think a few lines on the background to the fighting is needed.
When mentioning the fierce battle, just use 1 SIKH, ie "commanding a 1 SIKH forward post"
- Done.
suggest "attacks multiple times", as you are going to tell us later that it was eight altogether
- Done.
suggest "On 21 June 1950, Singh's award of the Param Vir Chakra was gazetted. The citation read:"
- Done.
any other awards? He seems to have had a row and a half of ribbons
- Those were service awards, which are not notable enough. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 12:35, 20 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Was he the first? Perhaps the first living and first Sikh recipient?
there is no mention of the public auctioning of his PVC, this should definitely be included in the article
The Tribune article has a bit more information, like he went to primary school, and apparently there is a memorial to him at the District Administrative Complex at Sangrur?
There is more information about Singh's involvement in a flag raising at independence in The Hindu article, as well as complaints that the government did not grant the family benefits due to them, this information should be included also
the infobox should probably have MM as well as PVC (at the top)
the image license seems ok
Once these comments have been addressed, the lead should be expanded to include a full summary of the main points of the article

That's me done. Placing on hold for seven days. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:54, 26 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Peacemaker67: Hi, thanks for the comments. I'm packed with outreach activities, I'll get back to these by the end of this week. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 14:43, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

No worries, let me know when you're done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:23, 1 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

G'day Krishna. Any progress on this as yet? Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:24, 18 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Peacemaker67: Hi PM, I suggest you to decline the submission for now. I may not find in the coming two weeks, as I am actively involved in various outreach activities. I'll nominate this article after I resolve the issues. Sorry for the trouble. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 13:23, 27 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Sure, Krishna. I'd be happy to take a look when you put it up again. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:03, 28 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Peacemaker67: Greetings PM, I've renominated the article, give it a look. I hope I've addressed all your concerns from this review. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 14:55, 10 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]