Talk:Kameron Michaels/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 16:44, 15 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this later. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 16:44, 15 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@HickoryOughtShirt?4: Thanks for taking this on! Armadillo pteryx 17:10, 15 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Review

her career in Nashville, is a comma needed here?
Yes, to introduce the non-restrictive relative clause that follows.
Please add his birthday under early life as well
Done.
Armadillopteryx It looks a little weird to say he was born an only child. I mean, technically all first borns are. Do we know his parents names? Can you says {He was born the only child to (so and so)?
Afaik, "so-and-so was born an only child" indicates they they did not have any siblings, but I get what you mean. How about this rewording? I am trying to find his parents' names in RS, but I have had no luck so far.
Ref 7 is dead but it is archived here
|url-status switched to dead.
Ref 12 doesn't really need to be there, all it supports is that he was bullied. The other ref goes into much greater detail. I would remove it
Done.
I would remove ref 17 from the first sentence of the second paragraph, unneeded
Will take a look at this in a sec.
- Armadillopteryx, did you look into this? HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 04:48, 2 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@HickoryOughtShirt?4: Yes, sorry, just got to it now. That's the only ref in that sentence that mentions the subject's work as a cocktail server, so I don't think it should be removed. Armadillo pteryx 05:13, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Armadillopteryx fair point.
Please timestamp ref 19 (when you click share, it will give you the option to timestamp the link)
Done.
Ref 21 seems to be dead
It loads fine for me. The archive link is also included in the citation.
Armadillopteryx, ok, maybe it's just because I'm in Canada ¯\_(ツ)_/¯. The video just says it is unavailable but if it works for you I guess it's okay. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:54, 27 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
HickoryOughtShirt?4, yes, I think that (as VH1 content), the video has geographic restrictions, so you need a VPN or similar to view it outside the US.
You switch from he to she all of a sudden, is there a reason why? (like in personal life you refer to Michaels as he)
Kameron Michaels (the notable drag persona) is she. Dane Young (the person out of drag) is he. The Personal life section only refers to the subject as Dane/he, since that section covers aspects of his life outside of drag.
an upcoming VH1 miniseries about the live show that is set to premiere on August 21, 2020 this needs to be updated since it is 2021. Did it air or did the pandemic push its timeline back?
No, the miniseries has aired on schedule. I updated the language accordingly.

- I am passing this now! It's unfortunate this took seven months before I decided to review it. I encourage you to "pay it forward" and assist with the backlog. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 21:26, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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