Talk:Kalle Rovanperä/GA1
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 10:51, 4 January 2023 (UTC)
Picking this one up, review coming asap. Kosack (talk) 10:51, 4 January 2023 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Unnamelessness (talk) 12:35, 6 January 2023 (UTC)
Initial review
[edit]Lede
[edit]• Place of birth should not be listed in the opening brackets, per MOS:BIRTHPLACE.
Done.
• Unlink Finnish, as per WP:OVERLINK , nationalities should generally not be linked.
Done.
• Add (WRC) after World Rally Championship to explain further uses of the acronym.
Done.
• "Rovanperä won a couple of titles" language is a bit informal here. Perhaps just won two titles in...
Done.
• "before made" > before making
Done.
• Works driver redirects to Factory-backed, worth linking for the uninitiated.
Done.
• I'd suggest removing the Colin McRae part from the lede, it's a litte too much info for here and go with "in 2022, he became the youngest..."
Done.
Early life and background
[edit]• "former WRC driver", use the full title and link for WRC on the first mention here. You're basically starting afresh with links in the main body.
Done.
• Link factory driver to Factory-backed.
Done.
• Do we know what age he started rallying? It seems a bit strange to say he was exceptionally young but not state when.
- Not exactly, so I re-write the sentence to make it more accurate.
• "participation into the professional" > in the professional
Done.
• "commented on the young Rovanperä" > commented that a young...
Done.
2015-2017
[edit]• No need to link Latvia, per WP:OVERLINK
Done.
• Citroen > Citroën
Done.
• Link WRC2 here when mentioned with the Skoda rather than further down.
Done. I would also like to mention that there is an ongoing RM at Talk:World Rally Championship-2#Requested move 18 December 2022. Whether using the hyphen (i.e. WRC2 or WRC-2) depends on the result of the discussion, though I personally prefer WRC2.
• I think liter is the American spelling, this should probably be litre for a Finnish national?
Done.
• "He won the first rally, with fastest at every stage", sentence doesn't make much sense in it's current form. Perhaps, He won the first rally, setting the fastest time on every stage?
Done.
• "despite of power steering issue" > despite a power steering...
Done.
• "Rovanperä to clinch" to is probably superfluous in this sentence.
Done.
• "Rovanperä a special permission" same for a here.
Done.
• The link to Finland seems a bit like an WP:EASTEREGG. If he competed in the Finnish Rally Championship, I'd just say that.
Done.
• "every rally on podium" > on the podium
Done.
• "Rovanperä made WRC" > made his WRC
Done.
This is down to the 2018–19 section for now, just so you have something to work on. I'll get through the rest as soon as I can. Kosack (talk) 19:56, 5 January 2023 (UTC)
2018–2019: Steady improvement and WRC-2 Pro crown
[edit]• "Rovanperä joined the Škoda Motorsport", drop the
Done.
• "Rovanperä retained with the team for the 2019 season", sentence is a bit jumbled. Either "Rovanpera was retained by the teamm..." Or "Rovanpera remained with the team..."
Done.
• "three more rallies for the rest of the season" > ralies during the rest of...
Done.
• What does SS9 stand for? Might be worth using the full term if it has one?
- SS is short for special stage, and 9 is the stage number. Anyway, I rewrite the sentence.
2020–2021: Top tier debut and youngest WRC event winner
[edit]• "Following a couple of lacklustre", a couple again sounds a bit informal, could do with rewording
- Reworded.
2022: Youngest World Rally Champion
[edit]• "before went on to win" > before he went
Done.
• "he further won back-to-back victories" sentence is a little clunky. Perhaps reword to something like " he secured back-to-back victories"?
Done.
• "he returned form to claim" > he returned to form to...
Done.
• "title in his career" of his career?
Done.
• "by late Colin McRae", no need to put late, it's not relevant to the subject.
Done.
Personal life
[edit]• "Rovanperä a special permission", no need for the a.
Done.
Rally victories
[edit]• The four wins in the WRC-2 Pro series state he was driving a Skoda Fabia R5 Evo, but the source seems to state a Skoda Fabia R2 Evo?
- R2 is not Rally2. Here the "Skoda Fabia R5 evo" is indeed "Skoda Fabia Rally2 evo", only the name changes in line with the regulation. You may find this according to this source.
That's about all I've got from a first run through. Kosack (talk) 07:36, 7 January 2023 (UTC)
- Think I've addressed/answered all issues above. Feel free to have a second look. Unnamelessness (talk) 08:13, 7 January 2023 (UTC)
Minor additional points
[edit]• "granted a 16-year-old Rovanperä to take part", probably my explanation but special permission can be kept here, it was just the "a" that I thought needed removing. So the sentence should be "Rovanpera special permission to take part..."
Done.
• "In additional to enter the rallies" > In addition to entering the rallies...
Done.
A couple of minor points and I think we're just about done. Kosack (talk) 10:08, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- All done. Unnamelessness (talk) 10:20, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- Nice work. A spot check of the refs comes back good. I'm happy that this meets the GA criteria. Promoting. Kosack (talk) 10:29, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Really appreciate. Unnamelessness (talk) 10:58, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- Nice work. A spot check of the refs comes back good. I'm happy that this meets the GA criteria. Promoting. Kosack (talk) 10:29, 8 January 2023 (UTC)