Talk:Justin Tuck/GA1

GA Review

Initial Comments: This article passes the quick-fail criteria...I like the quotes from Tuck, it really adds a lot to the article...the pictures are a plus...good job with the references so far; they're high quality, and well formatted. The big knock on this article is that compared to some other GA-class NFL player articles, it's doesn't have a great deal of info. My goal for this review is to be as thorough as possible, but please note it's my personal policy not to make any edits on the article I'm currently reviewing, so the list of changes is up to other editors to carry out. Here's my full review:

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

My requirements for GA passage:

Please add the Persondata template.
Rewrite the introduction paragraph. The first sentence should state why Tuck is notable enough to be on Wikipedia; as an example, it should read something like, Justin Lee Tuck (born March 29, 1983) is a professional football player for the National Football League's New York Giants." Additionally, the info should be organized into two paragraphs of three sentences each, anapproriate size for the amount of material currently in this article. Try to summarize the article more; remove mention of his parents and wife at the start, talk more about his college & NFL career, and shorten his philanthropy down to one sentence. Refer to GA-class article Rex Grossman for a prime example of a good intro.
Create a section called "Early life" and place it before the start of the football career section. Start by telling who his parents are, where he was born, where he grew up, etc. and include anything in his life that happened before his start playing football in high school. It looks like you can move the entire first paragraph of the current "Personal life" section here, along with some of "CentralCoosa County High" material.
In the third sentence of the "Central Coosa County High" section, remove the first in-line citation for Class 4A player of the year; the reference at the sentence is the same (reference #4), so the reader will not be confused at to where the citation comes from.
In the third sentence in the "Notre Dame" section, remove the word "And" from the start of the sentence, and simply use the word "Despite" to begin the sentence. Starting a sentence with "And" is not grammatically correct for encyclopedia material.
Expand the "Notre Dame" section. Some things to try and add are; was Tuck recruited by any other schools, why did he pick Notre Dame, mention what he did in specific games, etc. It's really up to you as to what to add, but as long as it's quality, relevant info, it'll be fine.
Wikilink the first mention of Michael Strahan in the "New York Giants" section. Depending on the outcome of the intro rewrite, this might the first mention of Strahan in the article, plus it's so far down in the article from the intro that a wikilink here isn't repetitive.
In the "Giants" section, list the exact date of his first NFL sack, and if the game against the Cowboys was at home or on the road.Specific info like that can really enhance a Wikipedia article.
Move mention of his wife from the intro into the "Personal Life" section; this is the appropriate place to cite any extra info about his wife, like when they married, how they met, etc.
Expand the "New York Giants" section. Talk about what Tuck did in specific games, notable plays he had in the Super Bowl, quotes from fellow players and coaches...whatever it takes to flesh out the section while adding quality info.

Suggestions for future improvement:

Refer to NFL player articles that have already reached GA-status, like Rex Grossman, to get a better idea of what the article needs to be like. Also check out the only FA-status football player article, Tyrone Wheatley, to get ideas about what needs to be done to get this article up to FA-status in the future.
Add more info about how he liked basketball; did Tuck have a notable basketball career in high school, was he offered a college basketball scholarship, etc.

Review Result:

GAN review ON HOLD

In short, this article needs to be expanded. The info it has is great, but it's lacking the detail of comparable GA-Class NFL player articles.

I will place the article on hold for seven days, during which time all requirements need to be met in order for me to consider passing it. When/if all the requirements are met, please notify me on my talk page, & I will review the changes. Thank you for your contribution to Wikipedia thus far, and good luck with the article in the future! Monowi (talk) 06:00, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]