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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 18:55, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
Gonna take a shower and then start on this. Cognissonance (talk) 18:55, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- "developed by Swedish developer" — Minimize repetition, remove "Swedish developer".
- "destroy government property on Panau for Chaos points. These Chaos points" — Minimize repetition, remove second "Chaos".
- "They worked with" — Clarify: "Avalanche Studios worked with".
- "generally-positive" — Remove the hymen--I mean, hyphen.
Gameplay
[edit]- Establish that it is played from a third-person view and link to Third-person shooter.
Development
[edit]- "According to Johansson" — Clarify: "According to Peter Johansson".
- "The team also refined parachute" — Fix grammar: "The team also refined the parachute".
- "an island with a variety landscapes" — Fix grammar: "an island with a variety of landscapes".
- IGN (source 22) is dead. Archive or replace it.
- PRNewswire (source 23) does not seem to connect.
- "allows the user to capture gameplay video and export it to the XMB or upload it to YouTube from the game" — "from the game" is unnecessary when gameplay recording is already established.
Marketing and release
[edit]- "A sequel to Just Cause was announced" can be simplified with "Just Cause 2 was announced".
Multiplayer mod
[edit]- Cinema Blend (source 40) is unreliable. Use the source it's quoting, GameSpy.
- Would be nice to have source 42 with the website=IGN parameter.
Reception
[edit]- "generally-positive" — There it is, again.
- "the game was widely regarded as a significant improvement of its predecessor" — Fix grammar: "the game was widely regarded as a significant improvement to its predecessor".
- Add website=VG247 to source 52.
- "The explosion was praised for its visual effects" — I think what is meant is "The explosions were praised for their visual effects".
- Source 51 should be updated with this and put website=IGN instead of "Pc.ign.com".
- "Kevin VanOrd of GameSpot and Ryan Clements of IGN noted a number of gameplay problems" — Keep it short, but establish what the gameplay problems were.
- "and travelling between locations was so enjoyable that players would rarely use the black marketeer" — If this is what VanOrd said, just prefix the sentence with "and stated that".
- "The game's difficulty and artificial intelligence were criticized as frustrating, sometimes spawning in front of the player" — What spawns in front of the player?
- "the standard and presentation of its cutscene was not on a par with the game world" — Fix grammar: "the standard and presentation of its cutscenes were not on par with the game world".
Legacy
[edit]- Microsoft Windows — Link to Microsoft Windows
Overall
[edit]- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall: The article has minor, but noticeable problems with references, grammar and prose.
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
- @Cognissonance: Thanks for the review! I have addressed all the issues. AdrianGamer (talk) 10:54, 20 October 2016 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- Pass/Fail:
- a (reference section):