Talk:Jumbo/GA1
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Reviewer: Shyamal (talk · contribs) 14:40, 15 March 2015 (UTC)
This is a very interesting article and is close to GA but will need a bit more work. I hope the nominator is still active.
Referencing
[edit]General comment - a lot of referencing needs to be checked again. The Harvard format links are broken for several footnotes. Some of the sources are dead links, some of them can be replaced with alternate book / journal sources. Here are some sources that have not been used:
- Scott, Matthew (1885). Autobiography of Matthew Scott. Jumbo's keeper. New York: Trow's Printing.
- Benton, Joel (1891). Life of Phineas T. Barnum. Edgewood.
- Sutherland's work does not even find mention.
- The ivory king ... (many interesting bits)
- McClellan, A. (2011). "P. T. Barnum, Jumbo the Elephant, and the Barnum Museum of Natural History at Tufts University". Journal of the History of Collections. 24: 45. doi:10.1093/jhc/fhr001.
- http://www.jstor.org/stable/1293123
- https://jscholarship.library.jhu.edu/handle/1774.2/8202
http://www.jstor.org/stable/40188110The Republican Elephant came up in 1874 although Nast made an interesting cartoon of Jumbo- http://www.jstor.org/stable/41068417
- Blewitt, John (2013). "What's new pussycat? A genealogy of animal celebrity". Celebrity Studies. 4 (3): 325. doi:10.1080/19392397.2013.831626. Alice's purchase after Jumbo's death is not covered
- Seems to miss out on the Disney Dumbo inspiration - ref. Chambers
Article structure
[edit]Please check the sequence again esp. within the sale section, was the offer to buy made first or was the idea of selling first considered. Many of the subsections are too slim and could well be just a paragraph within a main section heading. This will also help in better layout of the pictures (now pushing headings around). Will revisit with more comments. Shyamal (talk) 03:18, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
- Pinging SeeSpot Run, just to be sure he/she saw this. FunkMonk (talk) 11:27, 21 March 2015 (UTC)
Cancelled - due to unforeseen circumstances - nominator User:SeeSpot Run has been blocked for sockpuppetry. Shyamal (talk) 14:25, 13 April 2015 (UTC)
What's with the simple one-clause sentences?
[edit]This reads like a children's book, not an encyclopedia article. 70.192.8.45 (talk) 08:58, 14 June 2015 (UTC)