Talk:Josh Bartelstein
Josh Bartelstein was nominated as a Sports and recreation good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (August 30, 2023, reviewed version). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated. |
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I am not sure if Club Trillion is a term that I should use in this article. Is it a thing. Bartelstein had several club trill efforts if it is.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:40, 21 May 2023 (UTC)
Did you know nomination
[edit]- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Bruxton (talk) 15:45, 24 May 2023 (UTC)
- ... that as the son of a sports agent, Josh Bartelstein had a bedroom wall filled with pictures of himself with famous athletes? Source: https://infoweb-newsbank-com.chipublib.idm.oclc.org/apps/news/document-view?p=NewsBank&t=decade%3A2000%212000%2B-%2B2009&sort=YMD_date%3AA&fld-base-0=alltext&maxresults=20&val-base-0=%22Josh%20Bartelstein%22%20San%20diego&docref=news/12C551F85EEF3C38
- ALT1: ... that walk-on basketball player Josh Bartelstein was the captain of the national runner-up 2012–13 Michigan Wolverines? Source: http://www.mgoblue.com/sports/m-baskbl/spec-rel/110112aad.html
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Thomas Charles Sorby
- Comment: 9th of 10 QPQs for this review
Created by TonyTheTiger (talk). Self-nominated at 06:17, 21 May 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Josh Bartelstein; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.
- I'll review this. BeanieFan11 (talk) 01:17, 22 May 2023 (UTC)
General: Article is new enough and long enough |
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Overall: Article looks alright. AGF on the source for hook ALT0; however, I'm getting a 404 for the ALT1 source – you probably will want to change that. BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:06, 22 May 2023 (UTC)
- I have swapped in the internet archive url--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:31, 22 May 2023 (UTC)
- User:BeanieFan11, do you have a hook preference.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:32, 22 May 2023 (UTC)
- Either is fine. BeanieFan11 (talk) 01:56, 24 May 2023 (UTC)
- User:BeanieFan11, do you have a hook preference.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:32, 22 May 2023 (UTC)
GA Review
[edit]The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 20:15, 24 August 2023 (UTC)
I'll review this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:15, 24 August 2023 (UTC)
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Comments
[edit]- In the lead,
He played college basketball for Michigan as a walk-on and a 3x Academic All-Big Ten honoree.
missing "was" after "and"- Thx-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:29, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
- Can you speak to his birth year/birth date? Where is the sourced?
- The "Early life" section needs to be more focused. I would recommend creating a new "High school" section, but also tightening up details.
- I know this was the DYK hook, but the whole paragraph starting with
Because his father
seems extraneous at best. This could probably be summed up toBecause of the connections his father made, Bartelstein met many famous athletes and even worked out with Mo Williams, Bobby Simmons, and Kirk Hinrich
. - Individual details of high school games just aren't relevant ("made a steal...")
- Go through this section and really work to either combine sentences, remove superfluous details or summarize in a more succinct way. It really has too much detail.
- I know this was the DYK hook, but the whole paragraph starting with
- The "College" section is also way too detailed. For a player who in four years only played a total of 56 minutes (like 1.5 total games in 4 years), this section should be a paragraph of two, tops.
- The whole last half of the third paragraph has almost nothing to do with the topic of the article and just talks about the team. For someone who barely played on the team, this is excessive.
- The article notes that even though he was "captain", the real leaders of the team were others. The whole fourth paragraph seems superfluous at best. Not sure the relevance, but even if you want to say he played with a number of NFL draftees, naming each one seems excessive, especially considering his limited role on the team.
- The "See also" section isn't helpful and should be deleted.
- In the "External links" section, "stats" should be capitalized in both bullets
TonyTheTiger, at this time I am leaning towards a fail due to 3B, namely that this article is excessively long and too detailed. However, I am happy to give you a few days to see if you can focus it up. Happy to come back and re-review after. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:42, 24 August 2023 (UTC)
- Just getting to look through this review.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:37, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
- I think I will accept the fail at this time.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:32, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
- Ok, best of luck with it in the future. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 18:02, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
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