Joseph Jenckes Sr. was a History good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There may be suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Joseph Jenckes Sr., a 17th-century blacksmith in Massachusetts, was granted the first machine patent in America?
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The only general point I have found so far is the number of small, single paragraph sections in the article: referring to MOS:PARA, I would recommend you remove the subheadings where they head short paragraphs (e.g. 'First fire engine in America (inconclusive)'). Also, Use Template:Convert to convert miles to km, where it occurs.
America - there needs to be clarification about the term - presumably you are referring to the USA, but it can mean different things to non-US readers (see American (word)). //Diogenes99 fixed 2022-10-04
Remove all links to London (as directed by MOS:OL) here and throughout the article. //Diogenes99 fixed 2022-10-04
Infobox - link England to Tudor period; for the sake of clarity, consider calling Lynn ' Lynn, Massachusetts' in the lead section, as King's Lynn in the UK was also known as Lynn in those days; there is no need for the 'Other names' (as they are alternative spellings, notably different names, and are already provided in the text). //Diogenes99 fixed 2022-10-04
The date of Jenckes' death is not given in the text, and should be included, presumably after Jenckes died the following year.. //Diogenes99 fixed 2022-10-04
Without naming them all, a few of Jenckes' most notable descendants should be included in the lead section, (or simply the fact that he had several well-known descendants). //Diogenes99 fixed 2022-10-04
The terms Jr. and Sr. (e.g. John Jenckes Jr.) are anachronistic - nobody in 16th and 17th century England was named in this way (and perhaps also in America too during that period?). When they are taken out of this section, the text still makes sense, and so they should be.
The link in new members by patrimony leads to 'Livery companies' - surely this is incorrect?
Link: guild; apprenticeship.
The surname given in the baptism record is spelt 'Ginkes' - consider adding this information in a note.
Reference 3 ( Browne & Colket) cites 11 pages - can the citation refer to a particular page or pages, and not a range?
Remove any duplicated links (e.g. ' Saugus Iron Works').
Unlink 'Captain' from Captain Thomas Veale.
link - bankruptcy; wrought iron (without the hyphen); tuyere; slitting mill; patent; mint (Mint (facility)); dies (Coining (mint)); punches (Punch (tool)); Boston; Boston Board of Selectmen; air conditioning.
b. - because of a possible confusion over births/baptisms, or just for the sake of clarity, consider not using the 'b.' abbreviation in this section (or not abbreviating it in the first occurrence).
Notable descendants of Joseph Jenckes Sr. include his son, Joseph Jenckes Jr. - take out the abbreviations here (see above), also in the Notes section.
imo it makes sense to combine the Legacy and Notable descendants sections into a single section ('Legacy and notable descendants').
Browne (1952) - (registration required) (or the icon) can be added; as the information was obtained from the Family Search website, that should be included.
Browne. Colket - add a (registration required). Also for the BYU source, and Skinner.
There is an online version of Marine Research Society (1837) online here - add appropriate icon.
There is an online version of Newhall online here - add appropriate icon.
Is 'F.P. Fish' the same as Frederick Perry Fish? (I think so) - if so, he can be autolinked.
More author-links - Alonzo Lewis; Charles Montgomery Skinner; United States Agricultural Society.
Fish, and Southwick (2009) - add (subscription required).
@Amitchell125: Thank you for your efforts on this. I have been working on the GA for his son this week, but it was failed because I ran out of time. I will do my best to make the changes you requested this weekend. Diogenes99 (talk) 13:32, 4 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Hello Diogenes99, good to hear from you, don't rush unnecessarily to complete the article, I can give you time to do it, if I know how much time you need. Let me know.
