Talk:John Kinch/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 04:19, 20 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Notes

I put the jersey numbers in chronological order
Added his CFL status as National
PFA says he died in Perry, OH
- Added.
I was trying to verify which high school he went to first but neither ref 2 or 3 are working
- Thank goodness for the Wayback Machine! I found archives and added them.
"He appeared in 12 games with Saskatchewan during the 1979 season, and finished the year with a combined 15 appearances, eight receptions for 88 yards and one touchdown, and 23 rushes for 93 yards" I was initially confused when I read that part and saw 15 after 12 but I see it is combining his Ottawa stats too. Since his Ottawa stats are already in the prior paragraph, I suggest just making this part his Saskatchewan stats.
- Changed.
Ref 19 doesn't work either. I was trying to see if he coached football there. I suggest archiving these team bios. I used to have a Chrome extension for my browser where I just clicked one button and it archived the page.
- Well, this one seems lost - the Wayback Machine archived it at the wrong time and I can't find it online anymore... Any suggestions?
  - bummer, can you find any other sources for this info?
    - @WikiOriginal-9: I found a source for Riverside and for Lake Erie, though they don't have as much info and only verify that he was at the schools. I swapped them in. BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:19, 24 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I think that's all. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 04:42, 20 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: BeanieFan11 (talk) 00:54, 24 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Spell out Riverside high in the infobox? WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 12:46, 24 October 2023 (UTC) Also should that that assistant by riverside in the infobox? WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 12:49, 24 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: Done. BeanieFan11 (talk) 13:29, 24 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I can't figure out which high school he went to first. The obit source only has high school. Also, I didn't really notice but actually can you change River High in the infobox back to Riverside HS like you had before to be consistent with the other high schools listed above. If you spell out the other ones, they stretch to a second line. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 14:57, 24 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: I'm not sure of the order either - do you think we should still include Wilfrid Laurier - Youngstown State did say he attended there. I also changed the Riverside back to the previous style. BeanieFan11 (talk) 00:56, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

All points have been addressed. Passing the article. Nice work! WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 00:59, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]