Talk:John Hart Ely/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: X750 (talk · contribs) 08:38, 11 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Excellent prose writing, editor has passion for the subject & put a lot of time & effort into it. Consistent use of Oxford comma too. However, I would remove a tad of editorialisation (a good thing, shows editor is really engaged), took a lowly position as a public defender in San Diego. Remove "lowly". take a modest position as a public defender. Remove "modest". writing tirelessly to produce a set of legal memoranda. Replace "writing tirelessly" with "putting in significant effort". Remove all contractions too per MOS:CONTRACTIONS. of Stanford Law School,[25] remaining on the faculty until 1996. I'd replace "on" with "with". Replace "matriculated" with "enrolled". The Wages of Crying Wolf projected a profound influence. Replace "projected a profound influence" with "had a profound".

@X750 I can acquiesce to most of the changes above, but I would like to make a case for keeping lowly and modest; they add flair to the article, and I believe it keeps the reader engaged to a certain extent. Some wiggle room is allowed I think as I don't believe the prose diverges too much from an article like Learned Hand or Antonin Scalia. GuardianH (talk) 08:47, 11 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
Excellent prose writing, editor has passion for the subject & put a lot of time & effort into it. Consistent use of Oxford comma too.
However, I would remove a tad of editorialisation (a good thing, shows editor is really engaged), took a lowly position as a public defender in San Diego. Remove "lowly". take a modest position as a public defender. Remove "modest". writing tirelessly to produce a set of legal memoranda. Replace "writing tirelessly" with "putting in significant effort". Remove all contractions too per MOS:CONTRACTIONS. of Stanford Law School,[25] remaining on the faculty until 1996. I'd replace "on" with "with". Replace "matriculated" with "enrolled". The Wages of Crying Wolf projected a profound influence. Replace "projected a profound influence" with "had a profound".
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
No hints of WP:SYNTH. Potentially contestable statements all well-sourced. All sources are reputable. Earwig throws up high numbers but the quotes used are all attributed, and I believe give good context to the surrounding prose and are worth mentioning.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
No complaints here.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
Both sides of the fence included, critics and supporters alike.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
Nada.
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Can't really think of anything much else that could be included.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Minor changes. Should be an easy pass.

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