Talk:John B. Magruder/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 03:16, 22 November 2018 (UTC)

I will take a look at this article. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 03:16, 22 November 2018 (UTC)

General comments/suggestions: G'day, Money emoji, nice work. I have a few suggestions/comments: AustralianRupert (talk) 03:20, 22 November 2018 (UTC)

• the infobox says his date of death was "February 19", but the lead and body of the article says "February 18"

• Done. I decided to step in here as Money emoji hasn't responded for several days, and I have access to Settles via Project MUSE. Kges1901 (talk) 18:57, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• Sorry, I was busy due to Thanksgiving. I'll see if I can start working on it. Thanks to Kges1901 for stepping in.💵Money💵emoji💵^💸 19:09, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• in the lead recapturing Galveston, Texas the following year --> the year that this followed doesn't seem to have been defined.

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 18:57, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• link furlough

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 18:57, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• They had three children; Isabella (1833 – July 20, 1869); Katherine (1836 – April 26, 1896) Elizabeth; and Henry R. (1841 – January 31, 1907): there appears to be four names here?

• Fixed, that was the result of a misplaced word. Kges1901 (talk) 18:57, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• found the circumstances favoring --> "found the circumstances favorable"?

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 18:57, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• suffered a humiliating defeat: I suggest avoiding the word "humiliating" as it might convey a point of view. Probably best to just to say he was defeated

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 18:57, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• army–the Army of the Potomac–to disembark...: the dashes here should probably be emdashes, not endashes

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 18:57, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• Peninsula–about 13,600 men–was tasked...: same as above

• Done by Kges.

• The objectives of Lee–by assuming the offensive–was to : same as above

• Done💵Money💵emoji💵^💸 19:24, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• In Paul Octave Hébert, Magruder's predecessor's, tenure Galveston, Texas: this seems a little awkwardly worded. Perhaps this might work: "Magruder's predecessor, Paul Octave Hebert, surrendered Galveston, Texas, on October 9..."?

• Changes to recommended text💵Money💵emoji💵^💸 19:24, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• "The third-ranking..." --> "The third highest ranking"?

Changed.💵Money💵emoji💵^💸 19:24, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• ext links all work, no dab or dup links (no action required)
• "File:John B Magruder.jpg": needs a US licence

• Done by User:Money emoji. Kges1901 (talk) 22:53, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• the portal link should probably be placed at the top of the section it is currently displayed in

  Done💵Money💵emoji💵^💸 19:32, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• on the talk page of the article, there is a query about the date of birth: "Douglas Southall Freeman says that Magruder was born at Winchester, Virginia, on August 15 1810..." I wonder if this discrepancy should be discussed in a note, or in some other fashion? AustralianRupert (talk) 03:24, 22 November 2018 (UTC)

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 19:24, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

• the Earwig tool reports no copyright concerns: [1] (no action required) AustralianRupert (talk) 00:28, 23 November 2018 (UTC)

• It looks like all of the concerns have been covered. AustralianRupert Think its passed? (Thanks for reviewing this btw)💵Money💵emoji💵^💸 22:55, 25 November 2018 (UTC)
  • G'day, Money and Kges, yes those changes look good to me. I made a further minor tweak, as I realised I'd failed to mention a minor grammar issue. Thanks for your efforts. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 02:33, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

Criteria

• It is reasonably well written.

  a (prose): b (MoS):

• It is factually accurate and verifiable.

  a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

• It is broad in its coverage.

  a (major aspects): b (focused):

• It follows the neutral point of view policy.

  a (fair representation): b (all significant views):

• It is stable.

  No edit wars etc.:

• It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.

  a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:

• Overall:

  a Pass/Fail: