Talk:John B. Curtis/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:43, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
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- As one of the main topics, I think it's allowable here to link chewing gum.
Done
- "spruce resin. He started with a spruce resin" repetitive.
Done
- "he made from his chewing gum business" no need to repeat chewing gum.
Done
- "salary of $5 a month" etc, inflate. But also I'd say what he did before how much he earned doing it.
Done
- salable is a typo.
Done
- "quantity that had produced" been
Done
- "in 1848 and 1849.[2] In 1850," repetitive.
Done
- "before his competition" first mention of competition...
Done
- "Packing gum" fragment, no period, and why is the other image caption centrally aligned?
Done
- "week or two" not encyclopedic tone.
Done
- Did you mention what the "flavored" gum was flavoured as?
Done - researched extensively for the "flavor" and nothing shows in any books, google books, websites, or historical Newspapers.
- "1,080,139 " too precise by far, nearest $1000 would suffice. Check all other conversions.
Done = this is done with the "-4" parameter in inflation template. The "-5" parameter would give to the nearest $10,000; etc
- "most expensively built house" is that the same as "expensive house"
Done
- Consider adding {{clear}} at the end of the Personal section to stop the image on the right crushing the refs.
Done
- That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 07:53, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (Get vaccinated!) 13:18, 31 August 2021 (UTC)