Talk:Jo Ann Evansgardner/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Unexpectedlydian (talk · contribs) 20:54, 13 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I'll review this one using the table below - comments to follow shortly. Unexpectedlydian^♯4 talk^‽ 20:54, 13 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Sammielh, I have done an initial review and there are some minor comments in the table below. Thanks for your work on this interesting subject. If you have any questions do let me know. I will put the article on hold now. Unexpectedlydian^♯4 talk^‽ 15:07, 14 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking a look at this, @User:Unexpectedlydian! I have left comments below.

Hi again @Sammielh, thank you for addressing all of the comments. I am happy for this to be promoted to GA now, well done! Unexpectedlydian^♯4 talk^‽ 19:05, 16 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Infobox ~~Where it says "Political party: Republican", does it need any further explanation as to what context that was in? E.g. candidate for City Council and schoolboard?~~ ~~I've never seen this added to an infobox so I'm not sure how this would be added. I'm happy to remove her political party from the infobox if you don't think it's relevant.~~ No worries, happy to leave as is. Lead Y Early life Wikilink "2nd Army"? ~~Done~~ Academic career There were only twelve women who served as symposium chairs or gave addresses at the 1965 annual meeting of the American Psychological Association (APA), out of a total of 1700 speakers. This sentence sort of comes out of nowhere as it jumps back in time from the previous sentence, then forward again in the next. I'd suggest rephrasing or making the chronology clearer. I've reworked this entire paragraph, I agree with you that it didn't flow so I've added in some additional information from the sources that, while not directly related to Evansgardner, should hopefully provide some background and context. Let me know if you think any of it is too detailed and should be cut. Much better, thanks. Social activism ~~The following year, Evansgardner proposed that the term Ms. should be used instead of Mrs. or Miss Could you in which context(s) this was?~~ I've looked all over to try and find the context, as I figured it must have been significant for Love to include it in the book but she's not the woman to popularise the use of Ms, so I'm not sure. With so little information known, I'm reluctant to cut anything but let me know if you think that is best. The source backs up what is said in the article, so happy to leave as is. She was also involved in the landmark lawsuit against the company which began in November 1970 led by the Equal Employment Opportunity Commission alleging racial and sexual discrimination. She was also involved with organizing the 1974 Wonder Woman Conference Remove the repeated "she was also involved". ~~Amended.~~ Later life Y
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Lead Y Layout Y Words to watch None identified Fiction N/A List incorporation N/A
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Citations and sources are in the appropriate places.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	From a first look, I am content with the reliability of the sources. Source check I will check around 10% of sources. Rodgers, Ann (March 1, 2010) ~~In 1969, she was elected to the national board of NOW. Can't see in the source where it mentions 1969?~~ ~~Added additional citation for the year.~~ Butler, Ann (December 19, 1989) Y Weber, Bruce (July 29, 2009) Y Haney, Eleanor Humes (1985) Y Snow, Michael Sean (2004) Y Weller, Sheila (2008) Y
	2c. it contains no original research.	Article content is backed up with appropriate citations. Happy from spot-checks that there is no evidence of OR.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Happy from source spot-checks that there is no plagiarism. Copyvio detector brings up nothing of concern.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	I am happy from reading sources that this article covers the main aspects of Evansgarder's life.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	I am happy that the article is sufficiently focussed and does not have unnecessary detail.
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	Article is presented neutrally.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	Recent edit history is constructive, majority of edits are by the nominator.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Valid fair use rationale is provided for infobox image.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Infobox image needs a caption (roughly when was it taken?) I didn't upload this photo and I haven't been able to find a date for it anywhere. I did a reverse image search and can't find anything. I think we'll have to leave it as is, but thanks for looking.
	7. Overall assessment.