Talk:Jimmy Frise/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:12, 24 June 2016 (UTC)

Will review. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:12, 24 June 2016 (UTC)

General

• No copyvio/dablink/duplink/external link troubles.
• Prose looks flawless to me, excellent job!
  • Merci! Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble!

Lead

• The Canadian cartoonist James Llewellyn "Jimmy" Frise I think articles usually open like "James Llewellyn "Jimmy" Frise is a Canadian cartoonist best known for..."
  • Yes, but it's no rule. Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 22:55, 27 June 2016 (UTC)

Life and career

• to 12 pages by 1931 Any earlier figure we can compare this with?
  • Hmmm ... I've dropped this. Apparently the whole Star Weekly section started off as 16 pages, and eventually the comics section in it grew to 20 pages. Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 22:55, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
• whit débuted "which debuted"?
  • Fixed. Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 22:55, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
• and 12 December 1925 "on"
  • Fixed. Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 22:55, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
• Frise chatted with the frequent visitors...press without Mr. Frise." Seems to belong more to Personal life.
  • Really? But this is all at work ... ? Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 22:56, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
    • Not a big deal, optional. To me it seems this reflects more on his personality. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:16, 28 June 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the changes. I'm sure this can be promoted now. Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:16, 28 June 2016 (UTC)