Talk:Jim Umbricht/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 17:09, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:09, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

~~"making the Majors in" in this context, majors should be lowercase; only has to be capitalized when it's specifically noting MLB.~~

"National League top relievers" League's

Make sure records and scores (4-3) use ndashes.

"in the Class D Georgia-Florida League a low" comma after league

"as an pitcher/infielder." as a pitcher and infielder.

"he had an 15-15 " a 15

"mostly as an relief pitcher" a relief. Actually, there's a bunch of spots where you use an where it's supposed to be a. I'm not going to note them all, but hey do need fixing.

~~"the World Series, in which the " rm in~~
"He only appeared in one game during the 1961 season, pitching three innings in relief. Instead Umbricht spent most of the season at Columbus, " what day was the long game? Also, rm instead, doesn't fit.
"a better chance of pitching in the Majors." majors
"season in the Colts roster" on the
"by a starting pitcher after they are removed from the game" they were
"Major League history was a number ever retired" history a number was ever
"The Colts opening day match" In the Colts'
"in more games in a Astros" the one time you don't use an is the one time it's needed.
In references, Baseball-Reference should be hyphenated.
This is a case where a fair use image would be fine if you wanted to add one. If you don't want to that's more than fine.
"while having terrible control, walking five batters in 2.1 innings" I'd prefer a cite that actually notes the bad control rather than a game log ref here.
"He made a last minute start against the Los Angeles Dodgers, pitching against Don Drysdale on May 25, earning the loss." cite preferred due to the way its written.

I'll put the article on hold and will pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 22:17, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I will try to fix it by tomorrow, I'm commenting on a IPhone currently so can't do anything now. Thanks Secret ^account 05:06, 22 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I can keep this on hold until the end of June, but don't feel comfortable holding it longer then that. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:07, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

That's fine I'm experiencing some health issues, combined with a heavy workload makes me nearly impossible to edit on a computer, and when I do it's usually a 10 minute thing (instead I'm editing through my IPad or my IPhone, both of which is tough). I'll try to finish it later on today or tomorrow. Thanks Secret ^account 05:39, 27 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ok I should be working on this article later today, I managed to get some free time on my hands. Secret ^account 05:54, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I see a bit of progress has been made, but will the rest be handled soon? I'm leaning towards failing it since progress is slow, though I understand you don't have much time right now. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:55, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

It's only a few minor things I need to take care of. I will try to fix it by saturday/sunday. If it's not fixed by then you could fail it. Thanks Secret ^account 16:13, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Per the above, I unfortunately do have to fail it at this time. It can always be re-nominated when the remaining issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 12:19, 9 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]