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GA Review[edit]

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Nominator: Homerethegreat (talk · contribs) 21:18, 30 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs) 13:44, 5 July 2024 (UTC) Hello! I will be taking this one on as part of the July GA backlog drive. Please expect a review in the coming days.[reply]

VERDICT: This is a quality article that needs a few issues resolved before GA status. Please consider implementing the below suggestions. To allow time for said changes, I am putting this article on a 7 day hold. Additionally, a second opinion from an experienced reviewer will be needed before a final verdict can be passed. This is easily the most complex article I have reviewed, so I personally welcome a second opinion on the matter. Thank you for your work. Kimikel (talk) 02:55, 6 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Well-written[edit]

  • Copyvio check does not reveal any plagiarizing
  • Overall, this article is well-copyedited and is mostly error-free.

Lead[edit]

  • "leaders such as Rabbi Abraham Joshua Heschel and Jack Greenberg marched" >leaders, such as Rabbi Abraham Joshua Heschel and Jack Greenberg, marched
  • "and also contributed" > and contributed

Overview of Jews and Jewish organizations in the civil rights movement[edit]

  • "In 1910, other prominent figures helped establish the National Urban League." > like whom? in what capacity?

NAACP (National Association for the Advancement of Colored People)[edit]

  • "and Jack Greenberg who succeeded" > and Jack Greenberg, who succeeded

Murder of Michael Schwerner and Andrew Goodman in Mississippi[edit]

  • "rights activists murdered" > rights activists who were murdered
  • Last paragraph too short, merge with previous paragraph

Jack Greenberg[edit]

  • remove year of birth and death, merge paragraphs

Joachim Prinz[edit]

  • quotations should not be italicized
  • "(As Jews)" > [As Jews]
  • "There he said:" > In it, he stated that

Criticism[edit]

  • "even during the Civil Rights Era there wasn't" >even during the Civil Rights Era, there was not
  • "He argues that today Black people tend to downplay the collaboration while Jews tend" > In 2001, he argued that Black people tended to downplay the collaboration, while Jews tended
  • Jewish advocacy." > Jewish advocacy".
  • "Hannah Labovitz has argued against romanticizing the era, saying "this is" > Hannah Labovitz argued against the romanticization of the era, claiming it was not "a story about[...]"
  • "Kantrowitz argues" > Kantrowitz argued
  • "points to a disparity" > pointed to a disparity
  • "Hacker also quotes Julius Lester, an African American convert to Judaism, who has argued that African Americans may reject the perceived paternalism of some Jews within the civil rights movement, noting that this can itself be seen as a form of "benevolent racism"." > this whole sentence reads oddly. maybe: Julis Lester, an African American convert to Judaism, argued that some African Americans may have rejected the perceived paternalism of some Jews within the civil rights movement, which Hacker labelled as a form of "benevolent racism".

Legacy[edit]

  • "the 1967 war" > the Six-Day war

Verifiable[edit]

  • Endnote 5 has a formatting error ("Field" and https are merged)
  • "The Civil Rights Movement: Major Events and Legacies | AP US History Study Guide from The Gilder Lehrman Institute of American History" needs to be archived (url leads to error). also cut the AP US History part out of the title
  • spot check [7]: good
  • spot check [21]: good
  • spot check [62]: good

Broad[edit]

  • Comprehensive in its coverage

Neutral[edit]

  • Article is neutral, includes both positive and negative perspectives on Jewish involvement in civil rights movement

Stable[edit]

  • Stable, no edit wars

Illustrated[edit]

  • "Joachim Prinz, Martin Luther King Jr., and Shad Polier at American Jewish Congress fundraising event" > would be nice if you labelled who was who (i.e. Martin Luther King (center-right) etc.)
  • Images are all good license-wise and are beneficial to article as a whole