Talk:Jesusita Fire/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Midnightblueowl (talk · contribs) 11:05, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'll field this one.

Lede:

Resolved The lede currently contains information not appearing in the main body of the article. I would move this information into the main body and then re-write the lede in order to summarise the entirety of the article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:05, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Effects

Resolved "at the Multi-Activity Court at the UCSB Recreational" - "at the... at the..." is a little repetitive. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:05, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved Red Cross needs a link; maybe also "The Red Cross"? Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:05, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Investigation:

Resolved Hot work has been linked on its second appearance rather than its first. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:16, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved "each sentences" should be "each sentenced". Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:16, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved "A year later in July 2011" - maybe a comma after "A year later"? Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:16, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

In Popular Culture

Resolved Citation needed. If none can be provided, this sentence should be scrapped. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:16, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Midnightblueowl: I think I have addressed all your points. Any additional thoughts? Thanks so much! -- Zackmann08 (^{Talk to me}/_{What I been doing}) 23:59, 20 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Zackmann08; just a few more issues, largely those which have arisen because of changed to the lede:

Resolved We mention the time that the fire started in the lede but not in the "Events" section. I'd suggest that this information belongs in the latter but is not important enough for the former. Midnightblueowl (talk) 13:30, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved The lede mentions when the fire started but not when it was stopped. Midnightblueowl (talk) 13:30, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved " fire.[5]The" - space bar needed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 13:30, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved It would be good to archive the citations lest they eventually succumb to link rot, although that is not a prerequisite for passing at GAN. Midnightblueowl (talk) 13:30, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Midnightblueowl: So I'm sitting here wondering when you are going to finish the review... Then I come look at the page and realize that for some idiotic reason I wasn't watching the page. Thanks so much! All the issues mentioned have been addressed. :-) --Zackmann08 (^{Talk to me}/_{What I been doing}) 20:21, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'm happy to pass this now. Midnightblueowl (talk) 14:24, 29 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]