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Reviewer: DiplomatTesterMan (talk · contribs) 08:50, 12 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

TheWikiholic; I will be taking up this review. I will start out with some initial comments related to the review. This is a long one, and will accordingly phase this as per the article, the nominator you, and my own speed. It is good to see that you have already spent quite some time with this article. DTM (talk) 08:50, 12 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I first want to take up some fundamentals. This may be unsaid, but I would still like to clear it out.
1) Please take note of the way the following are used and presented— References, Notes, Citations, Bibliography, Further reading. I know different GA articles use these terms in different ways, but there is a need for some overall consistency within the article. I have some concern about the way "Bibliography" and "Further reading" is being used.
  • What do the items in Bibliography represent?
  • With regard to "Further reading", you have citations which link to items in "Further reading". Why not leave "Further reading" for items not cited, which readers can pick up if they want to know more? DTM (talk) 12:09, 12 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
According to WP:CITEVAR, this is an editorial decision. I am not telling you how it should be done or what style to use. What I am requesting is that it should be consistent and done knowingly within the article.
2) External links— Please sort out the links. I don't think these (Profile of Nehru in India Today and Nehru on Communalism) need to be there. According to Wikipedia:External links, they could be placed in external links. But why not "Further reading"? Then there will be some consistency within items in "External link", different from above sections.
3) Citation style—
  • Citation 106 unformatted.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 17:29, 26 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Citation 2 and 6 and 323 are articles by online newspapers (TOI, The Hindu, The Telegraph). There should be some consistency between the citation format.
 Fixed. TheWikiholic (talk) 17:38, 13 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Citation 50 and 220. Both point to TOI. However one uses "Times of India" and the other "The Times of India".
 Fixed. TheWikiholic (talk) 17:38, 13 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Citation 54 just says "Congress". Please explain.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 17:29, 26 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Citation 318 is in capitals. Not required.
 Fixed. TheWikiholic (talk) 17:38, 13 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
These are just some opening comments. Please ping me if there are any queries. Accordingly I will start addressing other sections and aspects of the GA review below. Cheers. DTM (talk) 12:09, 12 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Review

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Introduction
  • A widely admired author... were read around the world..... Weasel words not in body.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:09, 17 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • A Tryst with Destiny, which has been widely admired.... Weasel words not in body.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:09, 17 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • a prominent lawyer.... Weasel words not in body. (The section #Advocate practice points in another direction.)
Oh this is for his father Motilal Nehru DTM (talk) 10:22, 15 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • ...receiving the support of Mahatma Gandhi who was to designate Nehru as his political heir. Unreferenced.
  • Date dmy format is inconsistent in the introduction.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:09, 17 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • died as a result of a stroke ... stroke and heart attack point to two different articles. The body and infobox says heart attack, but the intro says stroke.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:14, 17 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Infobox

Early life and career (1889–1912)

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Birth and family background
  • Access level required for "The Hindu" articles.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:09, 17 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Pending The Hindu allows only a certain number of free articles per month, after which subscription is required. Therefore, I think it makes sense to add an access level here, 'limited' or 'subscription'. The access level has not been added as yet. DTM (talk) 06:18, 29 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:35, 2 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Nehrus: Motilal and Jawaharlal" author required in the reference
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:09, 17 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Krishna Hutheesing, became a noted writer... ...nothing pointing to her being a "noted" writer. TOI reference inadequate here.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:09, 17 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
? Maybe A Hindustan Times reference has been added now which merely says "Krishna became a noted writer". This is not what I meant when I said TOI reference was inadequate. A better source with something more about Krishan and her writing would be nice; as compared to required. DTM (talk) 06:18, 29 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Done A better sourced added.— TheWikiholic (talk) 16:55, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Please complete the citation details for Zakaria, Rafiq. 1960. A Study of Nehru.. Internet Archive has the book. Rafiq Zakaria is the editor. Currently he is placed as an author. Further, the book is a collection. The reference should reflect this. If the book is online and easily available online such as this, please link it. Other readers will then find it easier to access references. Accordingly the page number can be changed according to this.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 12:18, 28 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Nanda, B. R. (15 October 2007). The Nehrus: Motilal and Jawaharlal— The publisher is linked. The author Bal Ram Nanda could also be linked.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:43, 17 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Jawaharlal was the eldest of three children– Is this correct? The very next line says he had an elder sister.
On reading the next two lines, this makes sense now. DTM (talk) 09:34, 16 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Smith, Bonnie G. 2008. The Oxford Encyclopedia of Women in World History. Oxford— Smith is the editor. Also, the publisher is linked so she could be too, Bonnie G. Smith.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:43, 17 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Childhood
  • "Jawaharlal Nehru (1889-1964)". theosophyforward.com— promotional link
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 13:14, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Youth
Graduation
Advocate practice

Nationalist movement (1912–1938)

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Britain and return to India: 1912–1913
World War I: 1914–1915
  • Citation 25, Glimpses of World History can be linked though not a must, it is linked below
  • Argov 1964, the thesis citation has no page number
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 13:15, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Pending Is the page number correct? DTM (talk) 06:31, 29 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Home rule movement: 1916–1917
  • The Windsor Star citation, please provide the page number. Also please check if it should go under the title "Nehru Gave Up Life Of Ease, Wealth" rather than the current one. The layout of the newspaper is confusing.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:41, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Nevertheless, Besant formed... Usage of 'Nevertheless' here seems a bit misleading. The word applies to Nehru, this should be clear.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 17:52, 26 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
No changes were made with regard to this. DTM (talk) 06:31, 29 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Jawaharlal Nehru – a chronological account Please add citation details such as Jawaharlal Nehru Memorial Fund (JNMF)
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 17:52, 26 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Non-cooperation: 1920–1927
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:41, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Pratiyogita Darpan Extra Issue Series, Volume 12., even though the page number is linked through the reference, it would be a good idea to mention to page number in the citation as well. Please confirm if this citation adequately references the two sentences it references.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:41, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Partly done Thank you for adding a page number. Does this page adequately cite the text it is placed ahead of? DTM (talk) 06:31, 29 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed better source added.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:47, 2 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • non-Cooperation movement check capital letter
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:41, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Citation formatting for Ranganathan Magadi. Please use the title, sub-title and name format on the book and not the one provided by Google even though they both turn out to mean the same thing.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:41, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Nehru's Nabha jail ordeal lost in past". 15 November 2014. please complete citation details
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:41, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Fundamental Rights and Economic Policy: 1929
  • The section has a lot about Purna Swaraj but it isn't linked.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:57, 20 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 18:03, 26 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Maheshwari (1997) and Kochar (1997) citations require page numbers; aims listed will be verified accordingly
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:57, 20 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The citation for Rajmohan Gandhi's book 'Patel: A Life' currently only links the ASIN. It would be useful to link the Internet Archive version as well. Further, the book is used four times in the article. It could be converted into citation-further reading format.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 13:14, 28 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • he formed the Independence for India league- as per the reference, the 'l' in 'league' can be in capitals
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:57, 20 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Nehru agreed to vote for the new resolution.- uncited
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 01:37, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Citation 47. Please use the details given at the bottom of the page to fill in the citation details.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 13:29, 28 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • A pledge of [...] for mass civil disobedience were also underway. This entire paragraph and specific details are not adequately

cited. The reference quality could also be improved, further the Pearson Education citation does not reference many details it is placed ahead of.

 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 01:37, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Salt March: 1930
  • With reference to citation 50 The Great Dandi March, author Gopalkrishna Gandhi can be linked (as per the practice started above of linking publishers and authors, and as will continue below).
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 01:37, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • tried summarily behind prison walls- is this specific detail referenced?
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 01:37, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • There is an open bracket '(', however it is not closed.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 18:02, 26 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the first two sentences, 'salt satyagraha' is referred to using both small and capital letters.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 01:37, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Electoral politics, Europe, and economics: 1936–1938
  • Citation 56, Students' Britannica India, the incorrect volume is linked. This is the correct volume.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:40, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • As a continuation of the above point, this is a case of close paraphrasing/copyvio.
Reference text- During the mid-1930s Nehru was much concerned with developments in Europe, which seemed to be drifting towards another war. He was in Europe early in 1936, visiting his ailing wife, shortly before she died in a sanitorium in Switzerland. (pg 108)
Article text- During the mid-1930s, Nehru was very concerned with developments in Europe, which seemed to be drifting toward another world war. He was in Europe in early 1936 visiting his ailing wife shortly before she died in a sanatorium in Switzerland.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 02:55, 28 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:40, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Please link both Metcalf's- Barbara D. Metcalf and Thomas R. Metcalf. The Google Books link does not provide access to the page cited, pg 176. Internet Archive has the book; please use its link instead with relevant access level.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:40, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The two citations mentioned above reference a paragraph which is a case of close paraphrasing/copyvio.
Reference text- The watershed in his political and economic thinking was his tour of Europe and the Soviet Union during 1926-1927. Nehru's real interest in Marxism and his socialist pattern of thought stem from that tour, even though it did not appreciably increase his knowledge of Communist theory and practice. His subsequent sojurns in prisons enabled him to study Marxism in more depth. Interested in its ideas, but repelled by some of its methods, he could never bring himself to accept Karl Marx's writings as revealed scripture. Yet from then on, the yardstick of his economic thinking remained Marxist, adjusted, where necessary, to Indian conditions. (pg 107)
Article text- Nehru's visit to Europe in 1936 proved to be the watershed in his political and economic thinking. His real interest in Marxism and his socialist pattern of thought stem from that tour. His later sojourns in prison enabled him to study Marxism in more depth. Interested in its ideas but repelled by some of its methods, he could never bring himself to accept Karl Marx's writings as revealed scripture. Yet from then on, the yardstick of his economic thinking remained Marxist, adjusted, where necessary, to Indian conditions.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 01:15, 29 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Partly done Parts of this remain raising the issue of close paraphrasing - he could never bring himself to accept Karl Marx's writings as revealed scripture. DTM (talk) 06:59, 29 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
This has been rewritten a few days ago. Please have a look again.TheWikiholic (talk) 13:02, 6 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • While this is covered above, I want to point to the date/year mentioned- 1936. The reference says 1926-27. Although he was in Europe in both 36' and 26-27', the "watershed in his political and economic thinking" was in 1926 and not 36.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:40, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Please place the year and page number for the citation "Thakur, Pradeep". However, is this reference needed here? Apart from saying there was a Lucknow session in 1936, it references no more. Since I do not have access B. R. Tomlinson's book with the specific page number in question, and as per the explanation Wikipedia:Offline sources, we can leave that citation in good faith. A third source can be used to confirm the text.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:40, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • With respect to The Hindu citation, link Mohammed Ayoob, and provide access level.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:40, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • These lines are uncited- The elections brought the Congress party to power [...] and "equal partner" within Indian politics were widely rejected. This is one reference already used above that could be used for referencing a part of this. DTM (talk) 11:11, 19 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:40, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Nationalist movement (1939–1947)

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  • When World War II began, Viceroy Linlithgow ... The Disha Publications reference does not adequately cite the line.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:03, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Partly done Why would you keep the Disha Publications reference when it does not cite the line? The reference you have added, Samanta, has no page number. It is a 164 page reference. A page number helps. DTM (talk) 06:38, 29 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 16:57, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Menon can be linked in his citation Transfer of Power in India; V. P. Menon. Please mention the page number, even though the url directly links to it.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:03, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • ...the background is the same...; this quote is not in the given reference.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:03, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • On 23 October 1939, the... - Does pg 412 cover this? Including the specific mention of the date and the following words Nehru urged Jinnah and the Muslim League to join the protest, but Jinnah declined?
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:03, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Civil disobedience, Lahore Resolution, August Offer: 1940
  • For this article, entrance exam manuals, especially poor quality ones, could be left out. There are so many "better quality" sources on Nehru. This said, please remove Bhatnagar's UPPSC Medical Officer Recruitment Examination Part-1: General Knowledge Homeopathic/Ayurvedic - Competitive Exam Book 2021 and place a fresh source. Further, this source does not adequately cover what it intends to cite. Going back in the article history, this reference was added by this edit on 9 November 2018. The unreferenced text was placed well before the addition of the citation.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:26, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Author Stephen W. Sears can be linked.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:26, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • was 'denied by large and powerful elements in India's national life" - the quotation marks need copyediting.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:59, 28 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Japan attacks India, Cripps' mission, Quit India: 1942
  • Change Amy McKenna from last-name first-name parameter to editor parameters. Add page number. This has been referenced below (...until 15 June 1945) as well with a new page number. Format that citation as well.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:26, 3 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add the volume (vol 4) and page number (pg 108-109) to the citation for Students' Britannica India.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:26, 3 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add page number to the Mansergh, Nicholas (2013) citation.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:26, 3 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The nationalarchives.gov.uk citation points to a dead link. Archive link needs to be added. URL status needs changing.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 12:59, 6 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
In prison 1943–1945
  • Add author parameters to Civics & History.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 12:59, 6 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add specific page numbers for The All India Hindu Mahasabha and the End of British Rule in India, 1939-1947. Just now the entire 27 pages are mentioned.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:36, 13 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • A general sympathy...His prestige... The page linked to the citation The Gandhi Reader does not cover this.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:36, 13 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Cabinet mission, Interim government 1946–1947
  • Gaikwad's book has no year or page number
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 08:02, 7 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Indian Express citation is missing a number of parameters.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 08:02, 7 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • While all three citations are good quality; D. R. Gadgil's citation doesn't really cover the content it is placed ahead of.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 08:02, 7 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Prime Minister of India (1947–1964)

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  • Patel: Political Ideas and Policies is 'edited' by Shakti Sinha and Himanshu Roy. They should be shifted to editor related parameters. Accordingly the specific chapter and author(s) should be mentioned.
 Fixed. TheWikiholic (talk) 09:00, 7 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Republicanism
  • In July 1946, Nehru pointedly observed that no princely state could prevail militarily against the army of independent India.- picked up from the source as it is. This is discouraged. (Copyvio/close paraphrasing). However in this case the indirect speech needs some looking into which Google Books does not reveal in the preview.
  • Ok, so continuing from above, this is now a clear case of copyvio/close paraphrasing. Three lines have been picked up- In July 1946, Nehru pointedly observed ... would be treated as an enemy state.
 Fixed. TheWikiholic (talk) 09:00, 7 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Not done Changing references but keeping the text the same does not address the copvio/close paraphrasing identified! DTM (talk) 06:06, 9 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
DiplomatTesterMan I think it was a case where the reference was copied text from Wikipedia. That is why I didn't remove the content even though I replaced the source.— TheWikiholic (talk) 15:01, 9 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Business Standard reference Making of Indian Democracy, Nehru's role can be removed. It does not reference the line in consideration.
 Fixed. TheWikiholic (talk) 09:00, 7 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Diplomat also doesn't reference the line it is placed ahead of.
 Fixed. TheWikiholic (talk) 09:00, 7 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Does Manjeet Ramgotra's reference the line? If it does, add a page number.
 Fixed. TheWikiholic (talk) 09:00, 7 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Independence, Dominion of India: 1946–1950
  • ...cause of humanity." - remove inverted quotes.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 09:34, 12 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • On 30 January 1948, Gandhi was shot ... to Pakistan. - another case of copyvio/close paraphrasing.
 Fixed. TheWikiholic (talk) 15:20, 13 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Friends and comrades, the light has gone... - does not require two citations.
 Fixed. TheWikiholic (talk) 15:20, 13 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add author details for Boundaries of Belonging
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 09:34, 12 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Convert bare URL from core.ac.uk into proper citation/reference format.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 09:34, 12 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add page number for Benjamin Zachariah's book.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 09:34, 12 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is this referenced? - 200,000 arrests
Yes.— TheWikiholic (talk) 09:34, 12 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Format citation "Yasmin Khan 2011".
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 09:34, 12 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link author Karan Thapar.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 09:34, 12 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 09:34, 12 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is this level of detailing relevant to this article? - The constitution of 1950 distinguished between three main types of states: The next heading goes on to state - Under the Seventh Amendment, the existing distinction between Part A, Part B, Part C, and Part D states was abolished..... So if the detailing needs to be addressed, this will also need to be edited accordingly.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 16:45, 21 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Election of 1952
  • Add citation detail 'The Indian Express'
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:37, 13 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Format Myron Weiner correctly into first name- last name. Myron Weiner can be linked.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:37, 13 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
First term as Prime Minister: 1952–1957
  • Remove citation - PU Law Entrance Exam 2020. Add a better quality reference.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:37, 13 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Specify the page number for Jodhka (2002).
 Fixed TheWikiholic (talk) 14:37, 13 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove— Western scholars ... in India. —Not backed by a good source. A very general sentence that doesn't really add value. If there is a need to retain, a better source(s) is/are needed.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 16:45, 21 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Subsequent elections: 1957, 1962
  • The numbers who voter - spelling of voted.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 16:45, 21 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove reference Padalkar (2021); most likely a case of copying from Wikipedia; The previous citation here- Meena Gaikwad's citation- also seems to be a case of copying from Wikipedia.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 16:45, 21 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Popularity
  • Format the Economic Times reference "to come back to power with full majority..." with complete ref details.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:26, 26 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add more details to the citation for the video from Pathe on YouTube.
  • This is the name of the book, Verdicts on Nehru, could go in single quotes or it could be italicised or commas could be added; whatever does the job best.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:26, 26 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • This sentence does not read smoothly- Ramachandra Guha in his... campaign looked like:
  • Shift 'Penguin Petit' out of the book title and into another more suitable parameter.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:26, 26 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add more details to the citation for Eisenhower's quote.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:26, 26 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • A general comment on this section- There must have been one notable person who said something critical of Nehru's popularity? This section feels incomplete. The content in this section has to be differentiated from legacy as well. DTM (talk) 08:15, 20 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Vision and governing policies

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  • Can we place a timeframe for this?— After the exit of Subhashchandra Bose from mainstream Indian politics — the following bracketed text needs to be taken out of the brackets and connected with the first part of the sentence in a better way. All this has to be done keeping in mind the reference that is being used.
  • the power struggle ... without hindrance.– is unreferenced.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:27, 26 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:27, 26 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • References need to be formatted correctly and with complete citation details.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:27, 26 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Economic policies
  • The citation for the book The Commanding Heights requires a page number. As it is a ebook without page numbers that are easy to figure out, the location can be mentioned, such as the chapter.
Agriculture policies
  • A number of books in this article have day and month mentioned along with the year as the publication date. If we go by the 'Colophon (publishing)'; day and month can be removed. Please remove day and month from Brown's book. This needs to be checked for all citation and references concerning books. DTM (talk) 02:23, 22 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Social policies
  • #Education: This entire paragraph was present in the article in 2007 (revision)— Jawaharlal Nehru was a passionate advocate of education ... in the rural areas. The book, Freedom Fighters of India by Lion M.G. Agrawal was published in 2008. This is another probable case of a source copying from Wikipedia. The IndiaTV source has also picked up the first line as it is. Please find references that do not seem to have bluntly copied text from this paragraph. There are many sources for this, already present in this article, and online which can be found through a quick search engine search. DTM (talk) 02:09, 23 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • #Hindu Marriage law
    • Why is M capital in the header?
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:54, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    • Under Nehru, ... freedoms of women.— Is followed by four citations; this is a case of excessive citations. Either briefly expand the content according to the citations or remove some of the citations.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:54, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:54, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    • However, Nehru has been ... secularism.— These five sentences are unreferenced. The existing citation does not cover this.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 03:54, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • #Reservations for socially-oppressed communities
    • Format the reference properly. Page number required. The link points to page 20.
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 04:35, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 04:35, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Foreign policy
  • #Non-aligned movement
    • On the international scene, ... the Western bloc.— This entire paragraph was present in the article before the publication date of the referenced book "Ruling Dynasties of Independent India". Another probable case of copying from Wikipedia. This particular reference also has the entire text of the next paragraph, however those are referenced differently.
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 04:35, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 04:35, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done.— TheWikiholic (talk) 04:35, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Sino-Indian War of 1962

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Assassination attempts and security

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Death

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Key cabinet members and associates

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Copyvios

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Earwigs catches the following:

  • Cases where the reference has copied text from Wikipedia
  • Cases where Wikipedia has copied phrases from a reference
    • ...watershed in his political and economic thinking... Britannica
 Fixed.— TheWikiholic (talk) 13:31, 28 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

DTM (talk) 10:20, 15 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • A number of cases of copyvio, close paraphrasing, copying from Wikipedia, have been mentioned as and when found when going through the respective sections. They have been commented upon above. DTM (talk) 08:17, 20 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General comments on the progress of this GA review

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TheWikiholic, hi. Do you have any comments about how this review is progressing? DTM (talk) 09:50, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, no comments. You are doing a wonderful job. I know Nehru is a huge topic and the article is quite the undertaking. Thank you for taking the time to review the article. I look forward to more comments and suggestions and hope that we can get it to pass in the end.— TheWikiholic (talk) 14:58, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Can you please complete the above review comments. Some comments have not been addressed, despite the 'done' and 'fixed' templates. Please don't introduce new issues such as bare urls. I will give you some time to complete this, after which I will review the above points again as per GA requirements, and then we can move on to new sections. DTM (talk) 12:48, 26 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I have added some comments above with 'Maybe', 'Partly Done' and 'Pending' templates. (There are way too many templates being used, but that is another issue...) Irrespective of the remaining work to be done on the reviewed sections, I will be continuing with the review. DTM (talk) 10:56, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Second opinion

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Going by the above review progress, there are sure to be a few more cases of close paraphrasing, referencing sources that have been copied from Wikipedia etc. While the review is not complete, I am not failing this outright and asking for a second opinion. DTM (talk) 02:48, 9 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • I maybe will not commit to a complete second-opinion, but on a quick look, I see that there are quite a few issues.
  • MOS:SANDWICH in "Early life and career (1889–1912)" section
  • Multiple over-linking throughout the article. Suggesting to check it by User:Evad37/duplinks-alt
  • Very lengthy table of content. Sections and sub-sections should be merged
  • WP:Citation Overkill in few footnotes
  • Suggesting to hyphenate ISBNs, using this tool.

– Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:53, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@DiplomatTesterMan, How is this one going? – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:23, 14 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Status query

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DTM, TheWikiholic, where does this nomination stand? TheWikiholic, I don't see any attempt to address the issues raised in the partial second opinion by Kavyansh.Singh, even as the original review—ten listed sections are blank—and a potential second opinion are both incomplete. In a few days, the review will be four months old; if there isn't additional work done soon, perhaps it should be closed. Thank you. BlueMoonset (talk) 05:10, 9 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@TheWikiholic: I also think this should be closed. There is also conversation from this year emerging on the talk page that needs to be addressed. DTM (talk) 13:39, 9 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
No objection to closing. Will fix these issues later. Thank you DTM and Kavyans Singh for your time. I really appreciated it. Regards.— TheWikiholic (talk) 04:40, 13 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
DTM, as official reviewer, it is most appropriate for you to close the review as unsuccessful. If you aren't able to do so in the next seven days, I will do so for you. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:56, 16 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Seven days having passed, I have now closed the review as unsuccessful. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:09, 24 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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