Talk:Japanese aircraft carrier Sōryū/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 08:49, 22 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"After bombarding American forces on the atoll, the carriers were attacked by aircraft from Midway Atoll...": the repeated use of atoll is a little jarring. Suggestion: After bombarding American forces on Midway atoll, the carriers were attacked by aircraft from the island, as well as fighters from the carriers..."

Design

Second paragraph of Flight Deck and Hangers section; there are two very slightly different conversions to feet for 11.5 metres.

Construction and service

Launch and commissioning dates in this section are inconsistent with the infobox.
"...the other ultimately claimed to have hit the battleship California.": delete the words "to have hit"?
"Norwegian cargo ship "Norviken"": the name needs to be italicised.

Midway

This sentence is from the 3rd paragraph: "Unknown to the Japanese, the US Navy had divined the Japanese MI plan from signals intelligence and had prepared an ambush using its three available carriers, positioned northeast of Midway." It effectively repeats the last sentence of the 1st paragraph.
The "struck" date in this section is different to that in the infobox.

Footnotes/Bibliography

Duplicate links

Quite a few in this article: Midway Atoll (in the lead), flight deck, laid down, light cruiser, cruisers, Midway Atoll (again), magazine, Haruna, Torpedo Squadron 8 (VT-8), Hornet, Enterprise

Images

These check out OK to me except the following which, according to the copyright tags, were supposedly taken by sailors of US Navy?
File:Jap planes preparing-Pearl Harbor.jpg
File:Fantail Soryu.jpg

Other guff

I'll check back on this review in a few days. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 22 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for going over this so thoroughly. All done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:26, 22 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]