Talk:James Milner/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: IronManCap (talk · contribs) 21:27, 2 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'm interested in taking up this review. For initial comments, some ref work in adding dates and authors to refs is needed; the ProveIt gadget may be helpful here. Also look at archiving all urls using IABot, and find refs for the two ^{[citation needed]} tags in the infobox. Expect further comments in the next 7 days.

Done have addressed the 2 tags.

Lead

Move ref #7 next to ref #174 in #Style of play per MOS:LEADCITE Done
has been used → has played - as who used him (managers, presumably) haven't been mentioned Done
represented his school - mention the specific school here Done
Not sure him being a Leeds season ticket holder is notable enough for the lead, I would cut that Done
- I would also merge the sentences about him supporting Leeds and joining their academy Done
aged only 16 - rm "only" per WP:VOICE Done
Add "award" after PFA Young Player of the Year Done
Link free transfer to Free transfer (association football) and link vice-captain to Vice-captain (association football) Done

Early life

Yorkshire Schools cricket team - Link Yorkshire Done
other clubs in the north → other clubs in Northern England Done
what Milner aspired to do; that is, to come through the academy and play for the first team → what Milner aspired to do, in coming through the academy and playing for the first team Done

Club career

One BBC source doesn't justify "widespread praise from commentators" - I would remove "widespread" at the bare minimum Done
the chairman of the club at the time - who? Done
Preferably remove instances of "even" per WP:VOICE Done
extreme right of the field → far right of the field Done
"Winger" should not be capitalised Done

Shortly before the end of his loan period, negotiations between Villa and Newcastle began. - needs a source Done I have removed it as, after a look I feel it is adequately covered in the paragraph below.

Move the second image (the free kick one) to the left so it faces the text per MOS:IMAGELOCATION Done
- Also link free kick and Newcastle United in the caption per WP:DUPLINK Done
Add commas after at 16 years and 356 days and and its new manager Done
Allardyce praised Milner highly - rm "highly" per MOS:PUFFERY / WP:VOICE Done
it was rumoured in May 2008 that he would - replace "he" with "Milner" Done
Link transfer request Done

Milner continued to impress and scored his second league goal of the season against Blackburn Rovers on 7 February and scored a free kick from outside the penalty area at home against Everton as Villa came back from a 3–1 deficit to draw 3–3 on 12 April. This sentence needs c/e and some commas, potentially split it out Done
Link free kick in #Aston Villa, delink in #Style of play. Done

Man City section is well-written.

Vice captain → Vice-captain Done
Link Roma. Done
Add "season" after during the 2020-21 Done
Reword the opening sentence of the last para of the L'pool section to something like Milner was not a regular starter during the 2020–21 season, amassing just 11 starts and making 26 appearances overall. Done
As a result he registered his first goalless season of his career. → As a result, he registered the first goalless season of his career. Done

International career

Add a comma after "2003 World Youth Championship" Done
he also set up - "also" is unnecessary here Done
had a penalty well saved - rm "well" per WP:VOICE Done
sail over the crossbar → go over the crossbar Done

the Netherlands → the Netherlands Done
however he was substituted → although he was substituted Done
Where he started but - rm "where" Done
However Milner failed to secure a starting place. Only appearing once, in the final group game against Costa Rica after England had already been eliminated. - This needs c/e and sourcing
The paragraph beginning Milner was part of the England squad for EURO 2016. needs some serious c/e for grammar

@REDMAN 2019: Any updates on the above two points? They're the last two points to address before this passes GAN. IronManCap (talk) 14:54, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I have addressed these two points myself, and am hence passing the article. IronManCap (talk) 20:08, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Style of play

I would move the image to the left and quote box to the right so the image faces the text per MOS:IMAGELOCATION and alternates with the last one Done
Link Manuel Pellegrini Done
who managed Milner at Manchester City, described Milner → who managed Milner at Manchester City, described him Done
Add a comma after in the modern game Done
Rm the colon in the last sentence Done

Refs

Mark The Daily Telegraph and The Times refs with |url-access=limited Done
Please be consistent if possible with |work= vs |publisher= for BBC Sport; the former is preferable per WP:ITALICWEBCITE
Please add any missing authors using |first=, |last=, and if necessary, |author-link=

Other comments

Career statistics and honours sections look good.
Earwig suspects a copyvio of this website, although that is a low-level website that is almost certainly a WP:Wikipedia mirror. It also has weird line breaks within prose, almost certainly to avoid copyvio detection on its part, so no concerns here.

I asked about that website before nominating and was told that it shouldn't be a problem. REDMAN 2019 (talk) 12:44, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This script found no WP:DUPLINKs.
Good to see MOS:NUMBER being followed.

Those are my comments. Ping me when addressed. IronManCap (talk) 13:42, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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