Talk:Jailson Mendes/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Skyshifter (talk · contribs) 15:42, 1 July 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 00:50, 3 January 2025 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Looking good for the most part. Watch the "quote the newspaper" issue and maybe find some better words than "calm". Ping me when addressed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 07:01, 3 January 2025 (UTC)

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

Copy changes

• Mendonça was invited to act in pornographic films while he was in São Paulo, and ended up making three of them Remove comma WP:CINS
• Although he initially feared the repercussions, Mendonça calmed down after some time. Not terribly idiomatic: try rewording. Can you suggest some alternatives for "calmed" both in lead and in body? Maybe he was unsettled at first? Uneasy with being so visible?
• The first of them was made for a minimum wage fee, and the last for one hundred reais Remove unneeded comma.
• In one of these films, Maybe split this long sentence?
• On 29 June 2018, Mendonça suffered a heart attack and was taken to Planalto Hospital in São Paulo, but died shortly thereafter. Remove comma after Paulo
• Check quotes for MOS:LOGICAL, even in sentence fragments.

Sourcing and spot checks

Reviewed: 2, 3, 5

• The "embody an even more convincing 'bear'" quote is not Mendes's words; it's the publication. Attribute.

Images

• A fair-use image of the meme or Mendes may be useful here. Since Mendes is dead, any reasonable image would be valid with an NFUR.

@Sammi Brie: thanks! I think everything has been applied! Skyshiftertalk 19:36, 3 January 2025 (UTC)

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