Talk:Jacoba Atlas

A fact from Jacoba Atlas appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 18 September 2020 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that among rock critic Jacoba Atlas's many concert reviews was a "disastrous appearance" by Joe Cocker?

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The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 04:49, 13 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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~~... that singer Joni Mitchell gave hours of her time at home in Laurel Canyon, sharing her thoughts with music critic Jacoba Atlas in 1970?~~ Source: Whitall, Susan (2018). Joni on Joni: Interviews and Encounters with Joni Mitchell. Chicago Review Press. pp. 39–40. ISBN 9780914090441.

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Joel (The Last of Us)

Created by Binksternet (talk). Self-nominated at 05:33, 30 August 2020 (UTC).[reply]

New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. QPQ done.
Please link the films in the Filmography section.
You did a lot of research here, and it shows. But I was expecting something totally different after reading the hook; I thought Joni Mitchell was donating her time to a halfway house or something. If you would like to use this hook angle, please rewrite it; maybe put the bolded subject first. Alternatively, you have a lot of good detail to fashion a hook from in the article. Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 15:25, 7 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

ALT1: ~~... that music critic Jacoba Atlas reviewed many concerts including a "disastrous appearance" by Joe Cocker?~~ Atlas wrote, " Joe Cocker opened and closed at the Roxy Theatre and hopefully the talent that delighted so many people a few years back won't be thoroughly buried by this disastrous appearance."[1]
ALT2: ~~... that music critic Jacoba Atlas interviewed Joni Mitchell and Jimi Hendrix at their homes in the hills above Los Angeles?~~ Whitall book[2] and Roby book.[3]
ALT3: ~~... that Jacoba Atlas and Pat Mitchell were writing partners in 1990, then ten years later they were vice president and president of PBS?~~ This PBS ref covers the hook.

Here are three more hooks, Yoninah... Let's see how these work. I added refs and one wikilink to the filmography, along with some other minor expansion. Binksternet (talk) 17:57, 7 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. ALT1 has potential, though I don't see source verification for "many concerts"; each group of performers that she interviewed ends with a citation to the last one. I guess you could get around it by writing:
ALT1a: ... that among rock critic Jacoba Atlas's many concert reviews was a "disastrous appearance" by Joe Cocker?
I would also change music critic to rock critic. Yoninah (talk) 18:17, 7 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Let's do it – 1a. Good stuff! Binksternet (talk) 19:00, 7 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. ALT1a hook ref verified and cited inline. ALT1a good to go. Yoninah (talk) 20:21, 7 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]