Talk:Jack Stivetts/GA1
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 14:43, 26 June 2013 (UTC)
I'll review this article shortly. I'll be using an extra template or two as I'm guiding another user on how to review, so this may have a bit of extra information that the article writer won't need to worry about. Wizardman 14:43, 26 June 2013 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- A caption for the infobox picture would be beneficial, but not a requirement.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Here are the issues I found:
- "in minor league baseball (MiLB)" the abbreviation can be removed since it's not used later in the article.
- "He led the AA in earned run average (ERA) in his first MLB," in his first MLB what?
- " two of which he won more than 30." two in which fits a little better.
- You have the ERA and AA spelled and abbreviated in early life, but since you do both in the lead it doesn't need to be repeated.
- "his father in coal mining trade." in the coal
- "Comiskey was impressed by the velocity of Stivetts' pitched," needs slight rewording.
- "Stivetts was the team's opening day starting pitcher." not required, but linking to the Cardinals' opening day starters article would be nice here. Same for this one later on.
- The start of the 1892 season goes into a bit much detail on the rest of the team. Trim it a little bit if you can.
- "The regular season for the Beaneaters closed on October 15, with a" comma not needed.
- "Several rule changes were impletement before the" were implemented
- "he pitched Boston to 12–10 victory against the Spiders" Boston to a
- "Stivetts (a Protestant)" early life has him as a Lutheran, and while I get the relation lay readers may be more confused, so keep consistent.
- "Boston re-signed Stivetts for $2100" $2,100
- "the Boston manager Selee, sent Stivetts home" no comma needed here
I will put the article on hold for a week and will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman 00:12, 27 June 2013 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for taking the time to review this. I "implemented" each of your remarks :) If you see anything else, please let me know.Neonblak talk - 09:01, 27 June 2013 (UTC)
- Not a problem. Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 16:40, 27 June 2013 (UTC)