Talk:J. D. Hammer

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Review: July 25, 2022. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:J. D. Hammer/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Figureskatingfan (talk · contribs) 18:28, 20 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I will be reviewing this article for the June GA Backlog drive. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 18:28, 20 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
Overall, prose seems strong and adequate for GA. I have a few pieces of feedback and questions; see below. Forgive my pickyness in place, but that's an indication of the strength of the prose. I also did a couple of copyedits; please revert they're incorrect or if you disagree with them.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
I only randomly checked a few refs, but they seem fine.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
As a non-fan, it's hard for me to say if this bio is broad and focused enough. I suggest that you have another baseball expert take a look at it for that.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
Nice job; no overly fan/peacocky language.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
No apparent edit warring here.
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Only image is in the infobox. Question: is it normal practice to include images of players' stadiums or playing field in their bios? If so, would it be appropriate to do that? I trust that you're making the appropriate decision to include the one image, though, so I won't require it for this GAN.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Nice effort, strong bio, fun to read.

Prose

College career:

1st sentence: ...he struggled to hit the ball.' I don't know much about baseball, but I'm pretty sure this phrase means Hammer didn't do well as a hitter. It's a bit unclear to those of us stupid about baseball, so could you clarify?

Speaking of, I suggest that you look for jargon, which can plague sports articles. I'll try and look for it myself, but as a non-fan, I'm sure to miss some uses. There's going to some, so please make sure that there are links, something else I wouldn't notice.

2nd sentence: the phrase in relief needs to be explained or linked. Could "ERA" also be linked?

Possibly a really stupid question: Do college baseball seasons have individual articles? If so, they should be linked here, as in "2016 college baseball season".

Philadelphia Phillies:

3rd paragraph, 2nd sentence: The phrase "by retiring" is unclear. I assume that it means that he struck the three hitters out, but could you clarify?

Second stint with Colorado:

Last sentence: To my eye, there doesn't seem to ba a space between "Triple-A" and "Albuquerque". It could be just me, but if not, could you put a non-breaking space in-between them?

You're very close. Take care of the picky comments and I'll gladly pass this to GA. Best, Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 22:15, 20 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

User:GhostRiver, it's been a few weeks since this review. If there's no response in 7 days (18 July), I will regretfully have to fail this GAN. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 18:57, 11 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Christine. I noticed this review hanging out, and since it seems so close to GA status, I tried to address your feedback. I think I have addressed all of it. On the issue of retiring a batter, it's not necessarily getting a strikeout, but any kind of out. I noticed that in two places, so I added the wikilink to out for the first instance and reworded the second one.

Good call on linking the college baseball seasons. I had not thought of doing that before, but for NCAA Division I teams, there are links like 2015 NCAA Division I baseball season. I'd be happy to clear up any other concerns. Larry Hockett (Talk) 21:42, 25 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Larry Hockett, I had forgotten about it, so it's good that you took in on and completed it. I think that now with the changes you made, I can pass this article to GA, and will do so now. Thanks, Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 23:49, 25 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]