Talk:Indian Institute of Management Lucknow/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: TheSpecialUser (talk · contribs) 15:30, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to help. TheSpecialUser ^TSU 15:30, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I will be available anytime to respond. --Anbu121 (talk me) 14:16, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Right now, I'm in a hospital (broken leg) so I fear that I won't have more access but will try my best to give the review by tonight. TheSpecialUser ^TSU 02:19, 26 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I have addressed some of the points. The institute is going to publish a book in a few days. Will expand the article and address the lack of refs once I get the book. --Anbu121 (talk me) 18:14, 28 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

When you address the issues, please add {{done}} at the end of the line to keep a track or just ~~strike the line which is addressed~~ as I'm unable to know what has been done exactly. TheSpecialUser ^TSU 01:33, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Review

Since you've linked Indian Institute of Management in the lead, please remove the See also section Done
Per WP:LEAD, the lead of the article should summarize the article which it doesn't right now. Please expand it and at least make it of 2 good paras, each of 4 or 5 lines Done
Images need WP:ALT Done
Captions such are too small in the article. Per WP:CAPTION, please expand them Done
In Organisation, use ===stuff=== instead of ; Done
Same as above with Post graduate education. Done
This doesn't look much reliable. Please get another one. Done
[1] remove this as it hasn't been verified by twitter Done
[2] remove this also as it is maintained by "IIM Lucknow's Media and Communication Cell, and is a student initiative" Done
Please add english translation of "सुप्रबन्धे राष्ट्र समृद्धि" in the motto Done
Add first name of J.J.Irani Done
First name of R.L.Raina? Done
A Sports Committee composed entirely of students organises most of the sporting events in the college. It selects and facilitates the institute sports team. The Intracollege sports event called as Sikander is held throughout the year in a league format. The institute sports team participates in most of the popular college sports meets including the Inter-IIM Meet (Sangharsh) held in the second week of January every year. - ref? Done
Synapse,the committee for IT and Knowledge Management conducts a plethora of events in gaming, quizzing and systems areas and handles the IIML network. - ref? Done
It is recognised as an institution of excellence by the Ministry of Human Resource Development -> It is recognised as "an institution of excellence" by the Ministry of Human Resource Development Done
which houses gymnasium, swimming pool and indoor courts for Table Tennis, Squash and Snooker. The multipurpose utility hall (Samanjasya) is used to host most of the cultural activities in the campus. Bigger Events and Music shows during fests are held in the Open air theatre situated between the academic block and Library. - ref? Done
A Central school (Kendriya Vidyalaya) was established opposite the campus as a community school. - ref? Done
which is regarded as one of the main global accredition bodies in business education. - ref? Done sentence removed
The PGP course was started in 1985-86 - fullform of PGP? Done
All the major buildings in the campus are named in Sanskrit[19] according to the functionality of the building - link sanskrit and what does "functionality of the building" mean? Done Functionality of the building means: The academic block functions for teaching, hence named as Bodhigrih.
academic blocks (Bodhigrih-I and II) - in brackets, add like this academic blocks (Sanskrit: Bodhigrih-I and II) Note:I think this kind of format is used for indic scripts. Here the script is not sanskrit, the words inside the bracket represents official name of the buildings.

According to the article, "All the major buildings in the campus are named in Sanskrit". The names are in sanskrit according to the article as well as I can re-call few of them when I read. Using a template would be a bad option as we do not need sanskrit script. So adding (Sanskrit: ***) would be appropriate as a non-Indian or non-Asian reader might get a bit confused. TheSpecialUser ^TSU 22:56, 10 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

As said in the above bullet, make changes at other places where sanskrit script is written in brackets Note:same as above.
office and FPM classrooms - FPM? fullform? Done
The institute has an incubation centre for supporting the entrepreneurial ventures of its students and alumni - POV. please neutralize Note: I am not sure how to neutralize this. I have added a ref to strengthen it. Please neutralize if you can.
the ABM course - ABM? fullform? Done
Sometimes you've italiced in the brackets and sometimes not. Please be consistent and use italic form Done
The campus which was started in barren lands has been converted into a thriving ecosystem with the plantation of trees - please neutralize Done
The campus consists of Peacocks, monitor lizards, porcupines and a variety of other birds - what? do they even store birds in campus? zoo (=P)? no need of this sentence. or make it look like its an encyclopedic entry. Done
The college is packed with open lawns and tree lined pathways - Needs to be neutralized Done
Jamshed J Irani -> Jamshed J. Irani Done
10 industrialists, 4 Government representatives and 3 -> if the number is below 10, it is written like "nine" per MoS. So change 4 to four and 3 to three Done
The Director of IIM Lucknow, the head of the institution, is appointed by the Ministry of Human Resource Development. The institute has separate deans for Academic affairs and Planning and development. - ref? Done
with a Company or Organisation -> with a company or an organisation Done
3 month term in a foreign university during the period of October to December in their 2nd Year -> three month term in a foreign university during the period of October to December in their second Year Done
Make sure that you use "second" instead of "2nd" and similarly with 1st, 3rd,.... Done
International Programme in Management for Executives(IPMX) - space needed before ( Done
Space also needed before ( at; R.L.Raina(Planning & Development) and Archana Shukla(Noida) Done
IIML was ranked #5 by the Business Today 50 best business schools of 2011 -> IIML was ranked #5 by the Business Today in the list of 50 best business schools of 2011 Done
and #4 by the Hindustan Times India's top 50 business schools of 2011[55] and by the 2012 edition of CNBC-TV18's Top B-Schools in India - clarification needed. what did CNBC rate it? If it is 4, then split the whole sentence into 2. One about 5th rank and the other with two 4 ranks Done
life at IIM Lucknow is filled with academics, extracurriculars and entertainment. All the cultural programmes, competitions and management events are entirely organised by students. - ref? and needs to be neutralized a bit Done
The intranet portal Blondie has - remove italic and use "" Done
Synapse,the -> Synapse, the Done
The 3 day - 3 -> three Done
Students create games and various other simulated environments, to capture consumers’ subconscious thoughts - neutralize it please Done
A variety of opportunities exist for students to get a taste of entrepreneurship. - neutralize please! Done
Just Tea and Gossip and Bite - not italic but "" Done
The Entrepreneurship Cell conducts a competition called Bizness, - rmv italic and use "" Done
As stated above, same with Credence Capital, Aarohan, Synapse, Random Walk, and Abhivyakti Done

TheSpecialUser ^TSU 08:34, 28 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Though inactive, I'll be checking this. TheSpecialUser ^TSU 15:00, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Few more fixes

ref 9 needs to be fixed (format) Done
Unreliable source Done
Unlink Playback singer per WP:OVERLINK. Since the link appears in the first line of the article for the singer, the link is of new use Done
Also see if there were people who can possibly be called "notable" but are without an article here. Adding up red links help to get the idea that which articles are we lacking in. If you can't find any other notable person (who don't have article), then no problem. Note::I couldn't find any

Good to go for GA. I'd still like to have a look for 1a criteria and will give out final issues about the prose by tonight. Cheers! TheSpecialUser ^TSU 22:56, 10 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Last run...

All students are given separate single rooms in hostels. All the hostels have internet connectivity and common TV room. -> All students are given separate single rooms in hostels with internet connectivity and common TV room. Done
Every student gets an institute email id and most of the official communication and notifications are carried out through email. -> Every student gets an institute email id through which most of the official notifications are sent as well as communication are carried out. Done
Samvit, the annual leadership summit of IIM Lucknow witnesses some of the financial leaders and economists of the country and provides opportunity for the students to interact with them. - "and provides opportunity for the students to interact with them" - need to either remove it or re-phrase it. What about -> Samvit, the annual leadership summit of IIM Lucknow witnesses some of the financial leaders and economists of the country with whom the students get opportunity to interact. Done
supporting the entrepreneurial ventures of its students and alumni - "ventures" sound odd. can you suggest any other word instead of it? + this sentence is repeated. Please make sure that it doesn't occur. Done
A variety of entrepreneurial opportunities exist in the institute for the students. - "A variety" -> "Many" Done
are sold to the next batch every year - what do you mean by "the next batch"? Note: : Actually, the restaurants are owned by a group of students. When the students pass out, they sell the restaurant to a group of students in the next batch
INR 2000 -> ₹2000 Done
The mess - mess? any other word? Note::I couldn't find any substitute. 'Canteen' or 'restaurant' will completely change the meaning
Varchasva is the annual Cultural and Sports festival of IIM Lucknow. It is a three-day long event held towards the end of September every year -> Varchasva, a three-day long event held towards the end of September every year is the annual Cultural and Sports festival of IIM Lucknow. Done
Manfest is the flagship management event organized by the institute, while its sports and cultural festival is Varchasva. - it looks as if it is just kept for the mentioning. Remove it please as it breaks up the flow. How about -> Many cultural programmes, competitions and management events are held by various student as well as official committees in the institute. Done

This is it! TheSpecialUser ^TSU 21:22, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]