Talk:In My City/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kailash29792 (talk · contribs)
I will be reviewing this within the next 24 hours. Kailash29792 (talk) 13:27, 25 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Seems all well, but there is one bare reference in the third para. I don't even think it needs to be there, as this states that the lead section does not need sources.
Done: Removed.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Although the lead has three paragraphs (which is suitable enough), is it possible to extend the first and third para's? If not, never mind.
Done: Extended a bit.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"one group complemented Chopra's vocals, while the other group criticised the generic sound of the song." Who are the groups?
Done: Tweaked.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

The majority of reviews, such as Janhvi Patel's review and The Hindu do not contain any quotations by the reviewers. I believe some can be added.

I think its has adequate quotes.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Is Bollywood Life a reliable source? If yes, then it can stay.

Yes, It is reliable. Its a part of Zee News and DNA.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Commercial performance

"In My City" was a commercially successful in India. What grammar is that?

I feel this section needs only a little more minor copyediting.
Done: Tweaked.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Promotions

Is there any better name for this section? Or is this the best that can be? Or will "Marketing" do?

Are you intending on creating an article on DJ Nash? If not, please remove the link as it is red.
Done: Removed redlinks and i didn't found a better name as Chopra was promoting. So, i think it fair.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

A behind-the-scenes video documenting the making of "In My City" was shown during an NFL game on 13 September 2012. "behind-the-scenes" sounds colloquial, and the term is not in the supporting source. Also, is there any alternative for the term "shown" which sounds juvenile?

The video (directed by Joseph Kahn) was released on 29 January 2013. I'd prefer The video, directed by Joseph Kahn, was released on 29 January 2013.

I would like the term BMW linked, as it refers to a fancy car that is not known to just everyone.
Done: Tweaked.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Overall

These are the only comments I have. Once they have been resolved, the article can pass. Other minor issues have been taken care of by me. Kailash29792 (talk) 08:54, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Final verdict: GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Congratulations Prashant! I'm also happy that I could finish this review in less than 24 hours. Kailash29792 (talk) 12:00, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]