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GA Review

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The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.


Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 13:28, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 13:28, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]


REVIEW:

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Infobox

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  • What's the 'Use mdy dates' all about? I'm not familiar with this hidden template; what a great way to start off a review! :)
  • Remove 'flatlist' from the genre; you don't need it if you're only listing one genre

Lead

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  • I know iTunes store is a proper noun, so it shouldn't have a 'the' in front of it, but I think it may sound more clear if there were; not a big deal

Paragraph 2

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  • The proper lyric is "It's like everybody in this party['s] shining like Illuminati"
  • You can add the years (2015 and 2016) to the beginning of 'Rebel Heart Tour', if you'd like; it's not necessary though

Background and release

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  • Flow would be better if you added 'several' in between 'enlisted' and 'collaborators' in the first sentence
  • Insert a comma in between 'singing' and 'laughing' in the Instagram quote

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  • Avoid SHOUTING in source #4
  • Add 'a' before "pre-order for the album on iTunes Store on December 20, 2014, as an "early Christmas gift."

Composition and lyrics

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Well written; nothing to add :)

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Also very well written; I am impressed

Critical reception

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Nada.

Paragraph 2

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Nothing as well; Good job IndianBio, and of course the other contributors!

Paragraph 3

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  • If you wanted, I would add a word like 'similarly' or along that before the line: "Evan Sawdey of PopMatters said..."

Live performance

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  • I feel like the caption for the picture could be changed to "Madonna performing 'Illuminati' during the Rebel Heart Tour in Washington, D.C. in September 2015"

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  • You could probably add how the live performance by the dancers was acclaimed by critics.

Credits and personnel

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Perfect!

Charts

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I double-checked and you did have all of the chart positions mentioned, so nothing to add here.

References

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  • 1 - Link Idolator
  • 9 - Unlink Rolling Stone (you only need one link)
  • 19 - Unlink Rolling Stone (same as above)
  • 29 - Forgot the 't' in 'Rebel Hear[t]
  • 30 - Unlink New York Daily News (you only need one link)
  • 34 - Unlink Rolling Stone (same as above)
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  • Change the category from 2015 songs to 2014 songs, since it was officially released in 2014

End of GA Review:

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Wow. I am very impressed with the effort put into this article. Expertly written with very few mistakes, I see no reason why this couldn't be a GA article. Definitely fix the mistakes and take any of my suggestions into consideration, but I see nothing major (or relatively minor for that matter) wrong with the article. Thanks IndianBio! Carbrera (talk) 02:59, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

GA

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:
    B. MoS compliance:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
But Carbrera, this passing could have waited until I addressed the comments? There was no rush to pass it. —IB [ Poke ] 09:15, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I agree, but this article is excellent and I had no doubt in my mind that you would immediately make any changes for the better of the article. The few mistakes j noticed were EXTREMELY minor and did not effect the article's content as a whole. If the article had many more mistakes, I would have definitely put it on hold but I saw no need to do that. Carbrera (talk) 13:22, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, I addressed all the comments anyways. However for your future reviews don't pass it before the nominator addresses them because it is frowned upon, just saying this. —IB [ Poke ] 13:28, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the tip. Carbrera (talk) 13:30, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.