Talk:Ikuhiko Hata/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: BenLinus1214 (talk · contribs) 23:14, 15 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Second on my "to review" list, after Keturah. BenLinus 1214^talk 23:14, 15 July 2015 (UTC) Comments[reply]

Is the question mark in the very first parenthetical supposed to be there? - I think so. It's just a link for instructions on installing a Japanese character set.CurtisNaito (talk) 08:20, 17 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I think the lead could be expanded a bit, especially with a bit more specifics on the "scholarship" section and a mention of what's in the "political leanings" section. Done
What exactly is "profile from Marquis Who's Who"? Could you be a bit more specific--is it a print source? Web source? More information in general? - I have clarified that it is Marquis Who's Who On Demand, an online source.CurtisNaito (talk) 08:20, 17 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]
If you want to keep the first paragraph of "scholarship" relatively intact, I would prefer that you change the topic sentence with "Hata has been described by numerous historians as an important scholar on the history of modern Japan", because the first paragraph isn't about specific scholarship, it's more about Hata's legacy itself. Done
"while doing his bachelor's degree" is a bit informal, maybe "while completing his bachelor's degree"? Done
Something that would be helpful to readers is when you're describing Hata's essays, provide links to the actual historical events that are in the titles (i.e. "A History of the Second Sino-Japanese War") Done
Link to Marius Jansen. Done
Who's the quote in that paragraph from? Done
"Nanking Jiken and Death Toll Estimate" might be a better name…unless you think that's too awkward. I feel that it better describes the section. Done
"Research on comfort women" might be better—remove the "the". Also, link to "comfort women" Done
The "political leanings" section is primarily good, except that I would prefer that you have something at the beginning of the section like "Scholars have debated what they believe Hata's political leanings to be." Done
Why is it just "works in English" instead of total works? Why are works in Japanese only excluded? - Well, it would take far too much space to list all of Hata's works. I needed to think of some criteria to limit how long the list would be. I eventually opted to include only his English language books since I guess English Wikipedia users might be more interested in those ones.CurtisNaito (talk) 08:20, 17 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"Awards" should probably come after "personal life". Done

@CurtisNaito: A few problems. Too few problems to put it on hold, but there are a few things that should be taken care of. :) BenLinus 1214^talk 00:01, 17 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your helpful comments. Is there anything else I should do to expand upon your recommendations?CurtisNaito (talk) 08:24, 17 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@CurtisNaito: I'm still a bit troubled by reference one. Could you use the cite web template to include a url, title, work, author, and date (if there is one listed?) BenLinus 1214^talk 13:32, 17 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, how about this link https://cgi.marquiswhoswho.com/OnDemand/Default.aspx?last_name=hata&first_name=ikuhiko. This is where I got it from. However, you have to pay money in order to actually see the information. If this link is okay, I'll add it in.CurtisNaito (talk) 15:59, 17 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

That's good. I just added in the ref that you have to pay for it. Pass. BenLinus 1214^talk 17:00, 17 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail: