Talk:Igor Panarin's prediction of the United States collapse in 2010/GA1

GA Review

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This article has much to commend it. It is comprehensive in its coverage and well-organized. It is well-illustrated (although I think it could use a free image of Panarin if we can get one). Given its provocative subject, it's neutral and balanced in its point of view.

However, I'm failing it for now because of its prose. Going through a hard copy with a red pen, I found enough places where it still shows the signs of non-native English that I think would require a serious copy edit to fix. I also found some unencyclopedic sections (the intro graf of the "plaudits" section, (and why not combine it with criticism into one larger "Reactions" section), for one). And it has a little more detail than summary style dictates. It is probably encyclopedic that the reader know what city Infowar '98 took place in. It might be encyclopedic to know what building it was in. It is most definitely unencyclopedic that we be given the exact time and date of Panarin's presentation.

Once this is fixed (and I might be able to help out), the article can be renominated. Daniel Case (talk) 16:51, 30 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have also added this to WikiProject United States, to see if someone there is interested in working on it. Daniel Case (talk) 16:56, 30 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your review and recommendations! I think that the limits of my English knowledge and experience wouldn't let me do the corrections needed as I can't spot the places needing them. So if any native-English speaker would like to help here, as some of you have done in the past, I will be very grateful :) --Лъчезар (talk) 11:32, 31 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have spotted some over wikilinking. Some articles are linked twice in the same section and some things that shouldn't be wikilinked are. Jolly Ω Janner 17:36, 30 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

If you can be more specific or do these corrections yourself, it'll be great. Thanks! --Лъчезар (talk) 11:32, 31 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

A request has been posted at the Guild of Copy Editors. The Homosexualist (talk) 20:10, 4 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]