Talk:Ignacy Potocki/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague (talk · contribs) 23:59, 17 June 2013 (UTC) This article has languished long enough. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 23:59, 17 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Infobox and lead

Fine here.

Life

"...(Komisja Edukacji Narodowej)– the world's first ministry of education – he was.." Proper spacing in accordance with the hyphens.
In the first paragraph of the "Political career" section, you start a sentence with "In 1781...". In the second paragraph, you start a sentence with "On 29 May 1773...". Why the chronologic disparity?

Because the paras here are topic specific; the first one discusses his involvement with educational initiatives. The chronology here is secondary to theme. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 17:15, 29 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...office of the Writer of Lithuania..." Was he a scribe then? Either way, please elucidate.

Linked to offices of the Polish-Lithuanian Commonwealth, in lieu of stubbing a rather low-key pl:Pisarz wielki litewski.--_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 17:15, 29 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...a nickname bakałarz." Please write as "...a nickname: bakałarz." Also, what does this nickname mean?
You already wikilinked Familia in the first section.

Added an explanation. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 17:15, 29 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...with Russia attitude..." "...with the Russian attitude...", maybe?

Clarified. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 17:15, 29 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...of a Minister of War." No need for "a".
"...even after Poniatowski's access to it." Access isn't the correct word, maybe accession?
That is all.

Done all marked plus minor. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 17:15, 29 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Remembrance

This is as miniscule a section as any, but the content affords its own section nonetheless.

Conslucion

Very fine article. Once everything has been addressed and allayed, I will pass this article. Excellent work and congratulations! QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:03, 25 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]