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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 12:19, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

So meet again... check that you respond properly to any feedback during this review. --Kyle Peake (talk) 12:19, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Remove the format(s) from the infobox since the song was not released independently
  • WP:OVERLINK of Billie Eilish under Songwriter(s)
  • "co-wrote it, while the latter handled the production" → "co-wrote the song, while the latter handled production"
  • "Eilish's lyrics address several topics" → "Eilish's lyrics on the song address several topics,"
  • There are four reviews of the song in the prose which is enough to show what reception it got; add a sentence about the "received" reviews here and I will tell you afterwards if any fixes are needed
  • "For promotional purposes, the song was" → "For promotional purposes, "I Love You" was" but this should still start the second para
  • "and her Where Do We Go? World Tour in 2020" → "and her 2020 Where Do We Go? World Tour"
  • "When the album When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go? became available" → "When the album was released"
  • "and charted in several countries" → "and charted in several other countries"
  • "and Music Canada (MC)." → "and Music Canada (MC), respectively."

 Done

Background and release

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  • Img looks good
  • "was released as the thirteenth track" → "was released as the 13th track"
  • Cite the AllMusic ref here instead
  • ""I Love You" was written" → "The song was written"
  • "her brother, Finneas O'Connell, who also" → "her brother Finneas O'Connell, and he also solely"
  • "by studio personnel, John Greenham" → "by studio personnel John Greenham"
  • "Casey Cuayo is credited as studio personnel and as an" → "Casey Cuayo received credit as studio personnel and an"
  • Sure you can't find any background info, like where the song originated from or how Finneas O'Connell became involved with it?

user:Kyle Peake I can't find any information on where it was created and what the influence for the song was.

 Done

Composition and lyrical interpretation

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  • Wikilink tempo to itself and remove link on beats per minute
  • "the key of C Major" → "the key of C major" and fix the wikilink per this too
  • "called it a "dark" song reminiscent" → "called it a "dark" song, reminiscent"
  • "provide "an melancholy" → "provide a "melancholy"
  • "close to an otherwise thrilling album"." → "close" to the album."
  • "Lyrically, Eilish determinedly tries" → "Lyrically, the song features Eilish determinedly trying"
  • "and convinces them they shouldn't either" → "and convincing them they shouldn't love her either"
  • "didn't mean to say "I love you"" → "didn't mean to say 'I love you'" per MOS:QWQ
  • "A faint voice of an airline attendant" → "The faint voice of an airline attendant"
  • "during the second verse. "Up" → "during the second verse, which includes the lyrics: "Up"
  • "favorite songs he and his sister wrote" → "favorite songs he and Eilish wrote"

 Done

 Not done for the entire section --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:10, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Reception and promotion

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  • "When it was released, "I Love You" was praised" → ""I Love You" was praised"
  • "and "serene" and felt its lyrics" → "and "serene", and opined that its lyrics"
  • "saw the song as a" → "viewed the song as a"
  • "called the track a" → "called it a"
  • Wikilink Jon Pareles to himself
  • "which, according to him, are a" → "which he described as a"
  • Target to Billboard Hot 100 should be on Billboard Hot 100 instead of just on Hot 100
 Not done --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:10, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the record for the most simultaneous Hot 100" → "the record of most simultaneous Hot 100"
  • "The song also reached modest peaks" → "The song also attained top 100 positions"
  • Any specific order for the countries here?
  • "New Zealand[17] and the Netherlands" → "New Zealand,[17] and the Netherlands" if the order does stay the same
  • "by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) and Music Canada (MC)" → "in the United States and Canada by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) and Music Canada (MC), respectively"
  • "Eilish has promoted "I Love You" through..." remove this unneeded sentence since the entire para is performances
  • "The singer performed the track at" → "Eilish performed the track at the"
  • "on April 20,[21] and at Glastonbury Festival on June 30" → "on April 20, 2019, and later that year at the Glastonbury Festival on June 30"
  • [21][22] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
 Not done since you need to add a citation for Coachella too --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:10, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It was also performed at" → "It was also performed by her at"
  • "It was filmed in" → "The version was filmed in"
  • "the Greek Theatre. The visual shows" → "the Greek Theatre and it shows"
  • "with her brother and producer Finneas as" → "with O'Connell, while" or "with Finneas, while" if you change the introduction of him earlier on to stating "know under his stage name of Finneas"
  • Wikilink acoustic guitar to itself
  • "from thousands of fans’ mobile phones" → "from 1000s of fans' mobile phones"
  • "the sibling's rise slowly above the stage" → "the siblings rise slowly above the stage"
  • "When the track reaches it's conclusion" → "During the conclusion of the track"
  • "the bed is lowered" → "the bed that the two of them sat on is lowered"
  • Wikilink full moon to itself
  • "Eilish performed the song on the season premiere of" → "Eilish appeared on the 45th season premiere of" to avoid repetition, and add the target
  • "of the track with Finneas" → "of the track with O'Connell" but only if you don't add the stage name introduction

 Done

Credits and personnel

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  • Use  – so there is the right space between credits and personnel
 Not done --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:10, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

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  • Good

Certifications

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  • Good

References

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  • Make sure all of these are archived using the tool
  • Copyvio score looks good at 36.3%
  • Ref 1 is not needed per my AllMusic comment for the Background and release section
  • Remove Tidal from the title of ref 2 and Bad Guy should be removed too; change the URL to linking to this track instead if that is the one linked
  • MOS:QWQ issues with ref 3
  • Ref 10 should cite his surname as Pareles instead
  • Remove target on Insider for ref 12
  • Refs 21 and 23 are from an unreliable source; remove or replace
  • Remove target on Variety for ref 22
  • YouTube should cite as publisher instead for ref 25 with the wikilink
  • Remove wikilink on NME for ref 26
  • MOS:QWQ issues with ref 27
  • Remove target on Billboard for ref 28 since the chart table invoked refs come before that and have it automatically
  • Ref 29 should cite Complex as work/website instead but keep the target since that is the page for the italicised magazine; fix MOS:QWQ issues too
 Not done since the quotes issues are still there --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:10, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • MOS:QWQ issues with refs 30 and 31
  • Ref 32 has its author in the wrong place and MOS:QWQ issues
  • Remove wikilink for Billie Eilish on ref 33 and target Darkroom to Darkroom Records
 Not done --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:10, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake I removed the source because the article already has a reliable source.  Done

Final comments and verdict

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user:Kyle Peake All of the issues should be fixed! DarklyShadows (talk) 02:24, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

DarklyShadows I'll plank the not done template on anything you missed. --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:10, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Kyle Peake That should be everything. DarklyShadows (talk) 06:52, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
DarklyShadows You still need to make the proposed ref 33 fix, which is now ref 32 --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:50, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
DarklyShadows I am talking about the ref on which you have not removed the target to Billie Eilish or targeted Darkroom to Darkroom Records --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:40, 16 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Kyle Peake I think I fixed the issue. DarklyShadows (talk) 00:05, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Pass time! --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:15, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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