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GA Review

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Resolved comments from TbhotchTalk C. 02:08, 11 June 2010 (UTC)

*1st review Dead links 10 dead links (including false positive). Still 3 dead links (2 from Mahasz, 1 from HMV). TbhotchTalk C. 18:45, 10 June 2010 (UTC) Below. TbhotchTalk C. Infobox Is really neccessary the (see release history) and (see locations and studios)? removed. TbhotchTalk C. 18:46, 10 June 2010 (UTC) Lead was first released on August 28, 2009 through Sony Music in Europe, August 31, 2009 through Arista Records in the U.S. -> A synonym is needed. including top-twenty U.S. R&B chart hit -> Top ten is a hit, top 20 not at all. hit, title song "I Look to You" -> hit, the title song and "title song" should be wikilinked. It has spawned 'two official singles ... which is named after the album's third international single. -> How many singles has the album, two or three? It was re-worded, but still the same problem. Maybe could be re-weorded to "A promotional single, "Nothing But Love", was only released... inspired the Nothing But Love World Tour which... -> does not need to be italized. Really, does not need to be italicized the U.S. In the UK, -> the United States In the United Kingdom Background I Look to You had first been conceived in 2006 and production began fully in 2007 as stated by Houston herself at her Los Angeles album listening party in 2009 -> I don't know you, but this sounds awkward maybe I Look to You had first been conceived in 2006 and the production began in 2007, as said Houston in Los Angeles in 2009. Antonio Banderas and Sylvester Stallone -> full stop missing. Additionally she told press -> Additionally, she told to the press Music critics said it is more -> critics said that it sounds like an A typo (fekt) Right from the start, it displays Houston's voice over a club-friendly beat that blends a rough-riding thump with R&B -> Since the words "Right from the start" I knew that this was original research, this need to be reworded. In the Summer 2009 edition of Rap-Up magazine R&B singer-come-producer, Akon -> singer-come-producer? / ...of Rap-Up magazine, R&B singer Akon spoke... The entire section has original research. Release and promotion creative executive Clive Davis -> overlinked (produced and demo by Johntá Austin) -> , produced by Johntá Austin, listening party with Clive Davis -> listening party with Davis were Alicia Keys, Kaseem "Swizz Beatz" Dean -> Keys, Swizz Beatz... they were aleady mentioned. written by Keys and produced by Swizz Beatz -> Déjà vu? Again the album was played almost in its entirely receiving a standing ovation -> original research? Like "Music section" I see a lot of original research Singles and debuted at #12 in the UK -> and debuted at number 12 in the UK The single peaked at #5 -> The single peaked at number five The single peaked at #5 giving Houston her first Top 5 single since "My Love Is Your Love" in 1999. -> source? Other notable songs -> which make them "notable" World tour -> Wrong section. this should be in the "Promotion section" Commercial success U.S. Billboard 200 -> U.S. Billboard 200 (without wikilink) The album is Houston's fourth number 1 album overall -> The album is Houston's fourth number one album overall. to Nielsen SoundScan -> wikilink Oprah Winfrey Show -> need itallics As a result the Houston -> ? maybe "As a result, Whitney Houston Removed behind The Beatles and Elvis Presley -> wikilink and source? Removed Her last album, 2002's "Just Whitney," -> Her last album, Just Whitney, debuted at No. 85 -> number 85 debuted at #3 with -> number three debuted at #3 in -> number three, again the album reached #1 on the -> you know External links In general, need a clean, all of them need accessdate, work and publisher. Rf. 36, 46 (dead link), 97, 98, 99, 103, 108 need fixes

Final comments

Several problems that I notice, need a hard work, so I put the article on hold on until June 28, 2010. (UTC) Tbhotch^{Talk C.} 18:30, 7 June 2010 (UTC)

Response

Thank you for this very informative review. I've gone through (and i think i've addressed the issues). Lil-unique1 (talk) 18:30, 10 June 2010 (UTC)

• I'll tick () what was done, I'll cross () what still wrong. Tbhotch^{Talk C.} 18:41, 10 June 2010 (UTC)

• Many things were done, several more were ignored also new changes generated some typos throughout. I extended the revision time until June 27. Tbhotch^{Talk C.} 19:29, 10 June 2010 (UTC)

Sorry i wasnt aware of the latter issues, just been through and copyeditted the article. Regards, Lil-unique1 (talk) 20:45, 10 June 2010 (UTC)

Well, all(most) comments were resolved, I'll check it again in case I forgot something. Tbhotch^{Talk C.} 22:16, 10 June 2010 (UTC)

Further comments

• Lead

WP:ALT -> Personally, "Whitney Houston" written in the alternative caption text, is too specific, maybe "an afro-american woman" or "a woman with wavy hair" or something like that, of course I won't fail the article for this comment. Tbhotch^{Talk C.} 02:09, 11 June 2010 (UTC)

then August 31, 2009 -> typo

...based on an aggregate score of 70/100 from... I noticed that this is not on the "Critical Reception" section.

beating her previous career best first-week sale of 205,000 units with Just Whitney (2002). -> beating her previous career best first-week sale of 205,000 units with Just Whitney (2002) in the chart.

• Background

In February 2009, Houston made her official public comeback at Davis's "Pre-Grammy Gala", her first major live appearance since 2004 -> Source does not says that

Ref 2 has a typo: (E!Online)

rousing -> WP:Peacock?

Ref 1 and 6 need consistency.

• Music

R. Kelly contributed two songs -> Did you mean R. Kelly contributed writing two songs

In the song Houston -> In the song, Houston

Reference 10 has a typo (Latest activity 2 days ago).

Also released in UK and US -> Consistency needed

Houston hosted a listening party with Clive Davis in New York -> Davis was already mentioned.

and Vivica A. Fox[12] as well as many representatives from the American press -> Source?

September 14 and 15 and featured -> September 14 and 15, and featured

On October 18, Houston performed "Million Dollar Bill" live on -> Since "Million Dollar Bill" was used in the last line, perhaps -> On October 18, Houston performed the same song live on

Ireland, Sweden, Denmark, Finland, Germany,[23] Switzerland,[24] Austria,[25] Belgium,[26] Italy[24] and Australia.[27] -> Germany,[23] Italy, Switzerland,[24] Austria,[25] Belgium,[26] and Australia.[27] and do not need Wikilinks and remove unsorced countries.

• Singles

"Million Dollar Bill" which was written and produced by Alicia Keys and Swizz Beatz was -> "Million Dollar Bill", which was written and produced by Alicia Keys and Swizz Beatz, was

giving Houston her 13th number-one dance single -> Source

was originally lined up to be the lead single, but was succeeded by the album's title song. -> I'm confused, didn't was "Million Dollar Bill" which was released as the first official lead single, morover, where is the source?

Furthermore, following its performance on The Oprah Winfrey Show, the song charted at number 66 on the U.S. Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart. -> source?

on the UK X Factor which resulted in the song charting at number 38 and 44 on Irish Singles Chart and UK Singles Chart respectively.[32] It also charted on the Japan Hot 100 at number 16.[33] -> why it is italicized?

"Nothin' But Love" was set to be released as the album's third single to coincide with the tour but was only released to UK radio stations. -->

• Commercial Success

week sales of 51,632 -> full stop missed

• Chart procession and succession

the template {{Expand section|Danish, Polish and German Navigational boxes|date=February 2010}} must dissapear.

• References

36, 46 (dead link), 97, 98, 99, 103, 108 need fixes.

one dab link

I've re-reviewed the article, those are new problems. Tbhotch^{Talk C.} 02:09, 11 June 2010 (UTC)

I have done half of these. Aim to do the rest tomorrow and day after. Regards, Lil-unique1 (talk) 15:49, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

I am failing the article, I'd gave it a final date (28 June), and it is today. If you feel this is in error, you may request a Good article reassessment or a re-nomination. Tbhotch^{Talk C.} 19:06, 28 June 2010 (UTC)

Why is there a time limit on this process? If Lil-unique1 finishes this up 4 hours from now, why can't it be a GA? Does the "G" spoil if it's not put back in the refrigerator right away?

And anyway, it's still the 28th as I write this, an hour after you rang the terminal buzzer, so the deadline you picked (from where?) hasn't even passed yet. — JohnFromPinckney (talk) 21:07, 28 June 2010 (UTC)

As I said before If you feel this is in error, you may request a Good article reassessment or a re-nomination. I'd been waiting 3 weeks and Lil is busy with another article. Tbhotch^{Talk C.} 22:08, 28 June 2010 (UTC)

Sheesh! Sorry if i cant be on wikipedia as much as I'd like to. I didn't realise GA's were specifically time-restrained. It takes time to search for appropriate sources and to fix deadlinks. But nevermind... i'll work on it in my leisure and nominate when I feel that I've done all I can that way I don't have to feel pressured to work towards a deadline. Lil-unique1 (talk) 21:45, 28 June 2010 (UTC)