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Nominator: David Fuchs (talk · contribs) 17:02, 26 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 06:24, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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A lot of comma changes, but the article is very much on its way. It helps you've written others like it and have the format and reception content down pat. I added a screen reader–only table caption and that's about it. Ping me when addressed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:38, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

Copy changes

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  • The line was revised in 2023 to use the Apple M3 chip, and in 2024 to use the Apple M4. Remove the comma (WP:CINS)
  • the Ethernet port on the power supply (dependant on configuration), and the 3.5-mm audio jack on the left edge of the iMac.
    • Correct spelling of "dependent"
    • Remove comma
  • The iMac captures audio through an array of three microphones, and outputs sound through a six-speaker system that supports Dolby Atmos. Remove comma CinS
  • The cheaper models come with two Thunderbolt/USB4 ports next to the power button at the back edge of the computer, and lack Gigabit Ethernet as standard. Remove comma CinS
  • In contrast Dan Seifert, writing for The Verge, questioned whether a "a simple all-in-one desktop computer is something most people want or need at this point." MOS:LOGICAL: when quoting a sentence fragment, periods outside of quotation.
  • with TechRadar's Matt Hanson wrote that should be "writing"
  • Katie Collins from CNET said the design was a statement piece that served as a "symbol of hope" while working from home during the COVID-19 pandemic; and also considered this to be part of an anti-minimalism trend, an end to "austerity" in product design. Remove semicolon CinS. No punctuation belongs there. You could do Katie Collins from CNET said the design was a statement piece that served as a "symbol of hope" while working from home during the COVID-19 pandemic; she also considered this to be part of an anti-minimalism trend, an end to "austerity" in product design. as it would link two independent clauses.
  • while others appreciated the addition of ethernet on the brick allowed for reduced desktop clutter add "that" after "appreciated"
  • The iMac's speed was positively noted, with Engadget testing finding the machine's responsiveness waking from sleep mode or starting up welcome, and Monica Chin noting the iMac achieved higher single-core Geekbench performance scores than any previous iMac, including the iMac Pro. Consider splitting this sentence at "welcome".
  • though some reviews of the M3 models were surprised by its games performance Were reviews surprised or reviewers?
  • Tom's Guide and Digital Trends found the entry-level iMac disappointingly limited, and the added costs to add Touch ID unreasonable. Remove comma CinS
  • Other complaints included the paltry number of ports and their placement, and the low amount of starting memory and storage in the entry-level machines. Change the second "and" to an "as well as" to retain the comma.
  • The Apple Silicon iMacs pivoted the line back to a consumer focus, and away from enthusiast and professional use cases, Remove comma CinS

Sourcing and spot checks

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Reviewed: 9, 23, 27, 32, 35

No issues.

Images

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The vector illustration is appropriately licensed. The iMac logo falls beneath TOO.

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