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GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 10:44, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Hi, I'll review this one.

Assessment

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Lead section / infobox

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  • Unlink Iran.
  • I’m unclear why the first sentence has a citation—is that he was an Iranian prince controversial at all?
Mostly by new accounts and IPs. --HistoryofIran (talk) 18:48, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I would take out the citation here. Amitchell125 (talk) 21:02, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Done, moved them to the background section. --HistoryofIran (talk) 23:48, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Governorship

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  • ...abrupt death… - can you be more specific about how he died?

Reign

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  • No capitals in ‘’Astronomical Diaries’’.
  • ...abrupt death… - can you be more specific about how he died?
  • Who was Lucian?
Added that he was a 2th-century Roman historian. --HistoryofIran (talk) 18:48, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • The son is not named, it was most likely Apodakos. - Ref 6b (Shayegan) appears to be more definite about his son’s name than this.
Not sure I understand, thoughts? --HistoryofIran (talk) 23:34, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
It's now looking OK. Amitchell125 (talk) 06:10, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Bibliography

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  • Add source for Binar (1983).
  • Add source for Garthwaite (2005), presumably this book.
  • Add source for Brosius (2006), presumably this book.
  • Link C.E. Bosworth (Clifford Edmund Bosworth); Wilhelm Eilers.
  • url available for Shayegan here.
  • url available for Binar here.
  • url available for Schuol here.
  • Bosworth, Hansmann (1998) and Schippmann are not currently used for citations, and need to be moved out of the 'Bibliography' section. I would put them in a 'Further reading section' if you want to keep them in the article, otherwise they should be deleted. Amitchell125 (talk) 21:11, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

On hold

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I have put the article on hold for a week until 14 October. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 18:37, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Passing

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Great work, now passing. Amitchell125 (talk) 06:12, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]