Talk:Hurricane Waldo/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 17:51, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The lead should have more impact details, IMO. It is rather vague just saying that there was flooding.
- Added a little more.Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"October 5 based on daty from ship reports." - typo
- Done.Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"The storms began to intensify rapidly." - Storms? You mean "storm"?
- Lowercased.YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane
  - Not done. What I was asking you to do is take the "s" off of "storms" because in this case, it is singular, not plural.--12george1 (talk) 23:50, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    - I think I got it now. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 00:06, 7 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Tropical Storm then began to turn to the north" - Switch to either "The tropical storm" or replace the first two words with Waldo.
- Did the later. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Meanwhile, Hurricane Waldo reached it's" - That should probably just be "its"
- Why do always make this mistake???????? 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)
"The peak rainfall total in Mexico from Waldo was 9.61 inches (244 mm) in Jocuixtita/San Igancio, though heavy rain was also recorded along southern Baja California Sur." - The second part isn't really contradictory. So I would remove the word "though" and replace the comma with a semicolon.
- I don't like semicolon's, but fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"While no deaths or injuries were reported[5] much farmland and 600 houses were destroyed." - I would add a comma after "reported".
- Fine. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"One motorist was stranded for 30 minuets before" - typo
- I don't see it.YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - "minuets"--12george1 (talk) 23:50, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"The Sedgwick County, the county fire department freed 35 trapped people from rising flood waters," - Change to "In Sedgwick County"
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"In all, Waldo's rain were comparable to Atlantic" - Change to "Waldo's rains were"
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Reference #1 has the wrong title. In addition, you should change "Gunther; Cross" to "E.B. Gunther and R.L. Cross"
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Reference #4 is a deadlink since its from thehurricanearchive.com. Also, the date should be change to "10-10-1985" so that it is consistent with the other references.
- Taken care of. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The author of References #8, #10, and #11 should be the Associated Press.
- But there {{cite news}}. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Alright, I will let that slide.--12george1 (talk) 23:46, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    - This article now seems good enough to pass for GA.--12george1 (talk) 03:30, 10 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]