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Reviewer: Juliancolton (talk) 15:58, 19 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Nice job with this article. I was pleasantly surprised at how much info is available on the storm, but I have a few comments.

  • I think the article needs some clarification with regard to the longevity record. The lead says "Ginger spent 27.25 days as a tropical cyclone", which rounds to 27 days, but the "Record longevity" says Ginger persisted for "a total of 28 days." Also, the claim that the San Ciriaco hurricane lasted longer is a bit dubious, as it also spent 28 days as a tropical cyclone. At least one authoritative source – including the book "Hurricanes and the Mid Atlantic States" by Rick Schwartz – says Ginger and the San Ciriaco hurricane are tied for the longest-lived.
  • The anticyclone bit is very confusing and suspicious, and I can't find where in the MWR article you're looking. Which section is the relevant info in?
  • "For about six days, Ginger remained at minimal hurricane status." - I think "maintained" instead of "remained at" would be less clunky.
  • By September 28, Ginger was moving northwestward toward North Carolina and was steadily intensifying. - Awkward sentence structure. Any way to reword it?
  • What does "east-southward" mean?
  • I'm not sure why a separate subsection is needed for five sentences.
  • Fern and Heidi are linked twice in the body of the article.
  • The first paragraph of the impact section uses the phrase "the island" in four consecutive sentences. Can you try to avoid some of that repetition?
  • "prompting small craft warnings" - This needs an action after "prompting", like "the issuance" or "the hoisting".
  • "Before it struck North Carolina, the American Red Cross set up 28 emergency shelters" - the Red Cross didn't strike NC.
  • "with gale warnings northward to Rehoboth Beach, Delaware." - Seems kind of weird without "extending" or somesuch before "northward".
  • "with up to 7 ft (2.1 m) in the Pamlico Sound." - This is also cumbersome wording.
  • "The total made Ginger" - Weird wording.
  • "In Atlantic Beach, North Carolina, wind gusts reached 92 mph (148 km/h), which were the highest winds associated with Ginger in the United States." - Some redundancies; I would suggest simply "wind gusts reached[...], the highest in association with Ginger".
  • I think the rainfall map should be bigger, since it's really hard to read at its current size.

On-hold, etc. Juliancolton (talk) 15:58, 19 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thx for the review. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 21:41, 19 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]