Talk:Hurricane Dean (1989)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Canadian Paul 18:03, 8 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this article in the near future, hopefully tomorrow. Canadian Paul 18:03, 8 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Here it is:

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

At different points in the article, "Category X" hurricane is capitalized and at other points it is not. I'm not certain what the accepted standard is, but it should be consistent throughout the page.
Under "Preparations", second paragraph: "The watches for Martinique and Dominica were discontinued for the same reason." I feel that, given how specific you were with when the watch was discontinued for Guadeloupe, this sentence is distractingly uncontextualized. Could you be more specific as to when the watches were discontinued, even if it's just in relation to Guadeloupe (ie. The watches were later discontinue for...") Currently, it just sticks out a bit as a blunt sentence.
Same section, third paragraph. Is there any way you can cut down on the uses of the word "hurricane"? It's used six times in three sentences (including unavoidable uses in the name of an organization), which is repetitive and distracting.
Per WP:LEAD, the lead should contain information from all major sections of the article. Currently, there isn't anything substantial from the "Preparations" section.

Aside from that, everything looks good. To allow for these changes to be made I am placing the article on hold for a period of up to a week. I'm always open to discussion on any of the items, so if you think I'm wrong on something leave your thoughts here and we'll discuss. I'll be checking this page at least daily, unless something comes up, so you can be sure I'll notice any comments left here. Canadian Paul 17:07, 9 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I think I have done everything that you requested. Unfortunately, I cannot avoid use of the word "hurricane", since I have to say "hurricane watch", "hurricane warning", and "National Hurricane Center"; I am not allowed to simply say "watch" or "warning". Away, thank you for reviewing this article.--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 9 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Excellent! I believe that this article now meets the GA standards and will be passing it as such. Congratulations and thank you for your hard work! Canadian Paul 05:08, 11 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]