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Reviewer: Xtzou (Talk) 17:33, 7 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

In general, this is a very nice article. I have just a few comments:

  • "the feature ignited a tropical wave in the Intertropical Convergence Zone." - what is "the feature"
  • eye (cyclone) is piped twice within a couple sentences of each other, once to "eye feature" and once to "eyewall". Isn't this unnecessarily confusing to the reader?
  • "the more northern of which became consolidated and organized. Moving westward, the system organized into a tropical depression" - repeat "organized"
  • "Heavy fell on Hispaniola as the storm progressed westward" - rain? Except you repeat it in the next sentence: "High winds and heavy rainfall were reported there and in Cuba" - needs addressing
  • "The city of Chetumal was described as a disaster" - a disaster area?
  • "Since Carmen had moved ashore over marshland, it caused "far less" damage than initially feared" - don't see the point of using quotes for "far less"

I will put this article on hold while you address these issues.

Regards, Xtzou (Talk) 17:33, 7 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Done with everything, I believe. I've also undone one of your edits, specifically the one changing "initially" to "in the beginning". I feel the original wording was less clunky. Thanks for the review! –Juliancolton | Talk 18:07, 7 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Further comments That was quick. Looks good, except for one more thing"

  • " Initially threatening the major city of New Orleans, it veered westward and made landfall again over marshland, eventually dissipating over Texas on September 10. Damage was lighter than initially feared" - repeat of "initially".

Xtzou (Talk)

Got it, thanks! –Juliancolton | Talk 19:51, 7 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality: Well written and concise
    B. MoS compliance: Complies with the basic MoS
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources: Sources are reliable
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary: Well referenced
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail: Pass!

Well done! Congratulations, Xtzou (Talk) 20:04, 7 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]