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GA Review

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 22:03, 21 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hello GC, I will be reviewing Hurricane Carla. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 22:03, 21 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Dashboard Bot Checks

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Lead

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  • "The third tropical cyclone and first Category 5 hurricane..." Since you already say tropical cyclone in the sentence prior, try something else, like named storm.
  • "Heading north or north-northeastward..." Were the meteorologists or best track not indicative or unsure of such motion?
  • "...the outer bands..." Link bands to rainband.
  • "...$300 million in losses in Texas alone..." Could use a nb-note indicating that all values listed are in 1961 USDs.
  • "Several tornadoes also touched down in Louisiana and caused the destruction..." → "Several tornadoes also touched down in Louisiana, causing the destruction of..."
  • "Minor to moderate damage was also reported to 748 homes and 75 farm and other buildings suffered minor to moderate damage..." Remove the second 'minor to moderate damage' since its redundant–the fact is already mentioned at the beginning of the sentence.
  • "6 deaths and $25 million in losses in Louisiana were attributed to Carla." It is preferable to not start a sentence with a number, particularly a numeral.

Meteorological history

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  • You should link 'upper-tropospheric' to something suitable.
  • Link 'Surface charts' too, one might not know what a surface chart is. Or you could rephrase it to surface weather analysis maps for more clarity. The second usage of surface charts, and any subsequent uses, are o.k.
  • "...thus the depression strengthened into Tropical Storm Carla while located just northeast of Cabo Gracias a Dios." Did it strengthen into tropical storm strength, or into a Carla-strength? Try rephrasing to show that the storm was named Carla to reflect its intensity change and not that TS Carla is a type of category.
  • "...the storm reach..." Wrong tense.
  • "...and fell to a Category 2 hurricane on September 12." 'Degenerated' would be the better term.
  • "Later that day, Carla was downgraded to a tropical storm between Taylor and Coupland." This is the third instance of 'later' so far in this paragraph alone. Try combining with previous sentence or changing wording to avoid too much usage. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 22:47, 21 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Preparations

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  • "On September 8, a hurricane watch along the southwest coast of the state from Vermilion Bay westward." Missing a verb.

Impact

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  • One-syllable numbers here should be spelled out, and elsewhere in the article.
  • "...the largest hurricane-related tornado outbreaks on record at the time..." One of the largest, the largest?
  • "...10 feet (3.0 m) mean sea level..." You should say 10 feet (3.0 m) above (MSL).
  • A lot of the place names in the impact section could use links.
  • "the highest wind gusts observations" Should be gust, not gusts.
  • Port O'Conner → Port O'Connor
  • "...415 other building." building(s)
  • "Winds caused a local river..." Do they know which one?
  • "2 to 8 inches (51 to 200 mm) of rainfall fell in Grant, Tillman, Washita Counties." Again, don't start a sentence with a number, and you could use {{convert|2|–|8|in|mm|abbr=on}} instead of 'to'.
  • "...flooded damage in other areas..." Can damage be flooded? You should say flooded property.
  • "wahsed" Wah.
  • "...in northeastern part..." Either 'in northeastern parts' or 'in the northeastern part,' but not both at the same time.
  • "...and $670,000 in damage..." → '...and caused $670,000 in damage'
  • "...amounts of 7 inches (180 mm) or throughout northwestern Illinois." Or what?
  • "...second wettest tropical cyclone in Illinois..." A link to Illinois' section in wettest tropical cyclones in the United States would be helpful.
  • "Occurring a year after Hurricane Donna, officials in the Florida Keys took precautions to brace for potential impact from the storm. The United States Navy flew their planes out of Key West, while Coast Guardsmen evacuated Alligator Reef Light, American Shoal Light, and Sombrero Key Light. Ships docked at Key West sailed out to sea to ride out the squalls." This should go in the Preparations section, not impact.
  • "outerbands" Not a compound word.
  • "Hydrometeorological Prediction Center" 'Tis now the WPC, unless you want to be historically accurate and call it the 'National Meteorological Center.'

Aftermath and retirement

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