Talk:Hurricane Adrian (1999)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 20:56, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Given the large number of GAN's I'll put up soon, I don't want a backlog, so reviewing. 20:56, 28 June 2017 (UTC)

you don't mention it became a TS, hurricane, or it's peak intensity in the lead. Why? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 20:56, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"As extremely deep convection festered within a band west of the disturbance's center" link to rainband
- Already linked in the previous sentence. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 21:30, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"south-southeast of the southern tip of Baja California.[1]" just referring to "Baja California" implies the state as Baja California is just the northern part of the peninsula, and yes, this is one of the things the NHC gets wrong. Changed to "Baja California Peninsula". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 20:56, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"The storm further organized to attain its peak as a Category 2 hurricane " on what scale? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 20:56, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
" and the storm passed over ocean temperatures near 25°C (77°F).[6] " why metric units first all of a sudden? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 20:56, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"the cyclone degenerated into a remnant low by 18:00 UTC on June 22 over the open waters of the East Pacific.[1]" did it? the best track doesn't mentioned a low" phase and the term "remnant low" was not introduced until 2002. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 20:56, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- The TCR says it was reduced to a swirl of low clouds, I think that's enough. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 21:30, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  - Then say it became a swirl of low clouds, given that remnant low is an actual term the NHC uses, and we have no proof it became one. It'd be like saying a storm became extratropical when it became a post-tropical cyclone. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:38, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"The outer bands of the hurricane produced heavy rainfall peaking at 15.75 in (400 mm) in the municipality of Coyutla;[13] " comma after "rainfall". YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 20:56, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- No. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 21:30, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Get rid of 1999 PHS in the see also section and add Hurricane Cosme (2013) in. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 20:56, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Why are there only location fields for the NHC refs? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 20:56, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I fixed most of the issues addressed here. I'll go through the LN refs and add locations in a bit. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 21:30, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]