Talk:Hot (Inna album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 02:57, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   "with Sebastian Barac, Radu Bolfea and Marcel Botezan" - I'd say its unnecessary to specify these individual artists in the lead, especially since none of these artists have their own wiki article. I'd just say she collaborated with "Romanian trio Play & Win"

 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:29, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

1. I'd definitely remove the piping of "Electronic dance music" to "EDM" in the lead. 'Electronic dance music' is the name of the target article and people non familiar with popular music won't have a clue what EDM stands for. Specify "(EDM)" in brackets after the first instance so you can continue using that term throughout the article though.

 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:29, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

1. "For further promotion, Inna also had several concerts." This sentence comes across as a little vague, can you flesh it out a bit? How many concerts and whereabouts?

 Done I've expanded it with the amount of concerts he had. Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:29, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

1. "with her mother, grandmother and grandfather singing as a hobby" - this is confusing - are you saying she sang with them as a hobby? Or are you saying they all sang as a hobby which influenced her to become an artist?

 Done The latter thing is meant; tried to clarify it... Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:29, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

1. "She attended the Colegiul Economic (Economy College) in Mangali" - did she graduate?

 Done Yes, she did; added that... Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:29, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

1. "For the album's release in Romania, Inna's fans had the chance to choose one from five pictures as the cover sleeve" - I see several issues with this sentence. How about simplifying to something like, "In Romania, the album was released with five different cover sleeves to choose from"?

 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:29, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

1. You've got "Hot moved 500,000 units worldwide as of December 2011" in the 'Commercial performance' section, then "which according to Libertatea sold a total of 500,000 copies in France as of April 2011" in the 'Singles' section. Or is the latter referring to 500,00 sales of singles only? If so, please clarify?

 Done It referrs to the singles; clarified... Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:29, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

1. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   I'm assuming good faith on sources not in English, in terms of both reliability of source and accuracy of statements.

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

2. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

3. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

4. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

5. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

6. Overall:

   Pass or Fail: Looks pretty good. Placing on hold while minor issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 03:18, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

@Freikorp: Hi there and thanks you very much for your review... I believe I have implemented all your suggestions. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:29, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

Looks good. Happy to pass this now. Freikorp (talk) 09:43, 4 March 2018 (UTC)