Talk:Hog Island (San Joaquin County)/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:51, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- Lead at one sentence is not an adequate summary of the article, even if it is a short article.
Fixed.
- "USGS aerial imagery of Hog Island." fragment, no full stop.
Fixed.
- "district.[2][3]. " remove second full stop.
Fixed.
- "are often discussed simultaneously" what does that mean?
Fixed.
- "100 miles" convert.
Fixed.
- "60 miles northwest" likewise.
Fixed.
- "a 1910 USGS map" spell it out first time.
Fixed.
- "in 1914.[14] A 1923 " repetitive.
Fixed.
- "In 2007, the owners" ... and fourteen years later...?
Added some information from 2011 (and at least something about the island from 2016), but information about the camping venue was surprisingly hard to track down; even county planning documents and parcel information didn't really say much.
- Highest elevation appears in infobox but not in text, could add a sentence for that.
Fixed.
- Still marked as a stub which it patently is not.
Fixed.
- Be consistent, some of your online sources have access dates, others don't.
Fixed.
That's it for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 07:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
- Taking a crack at this now. I will deposit whatever random links I find on the talk page, in the hopes of turning up something later than 2007. jp×g 08:30, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
- Okay, I have found a couple of links, but nothing especially promising (the last word anyone had on those development plans seems to have been in 2011). I will try to incorporate those; the rest of the stuff is copyediting, which I can do quickly. jp×g 09:40, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: I've gotten around to it, what do you think? jp×g 07:13, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- Okay, I have found a couple of links, but nothing especially promising (the last word anyone had on those development plans seems to have been in 2011). I will try to incorporate those; the rest of the stuff is copyediting, which I can do quickly. jp×g 09:40, 6 September 2021 (UTC)