Talk:History of the National Hockey League (2017–present)/GA1
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Nominator: The Kip (talk · contribs) 19:31, 28 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs) 05:51, 7 January 2025 (UTC)
Hello, I will be reviewing this article as part of the January GAN drive. Please expect comments from me within the next few days. Kimikel (talk) 05:51, 7 January 2025 (UTC)
- @The Kip: I've left my initial review below. Please let me know when you get a chance to address all of my comments. If you have any questions or concerns regarding my suggestions, feel free to let me know. Thank you. Kimikel (talk) 17:59, 8 January 2025 (UTC)
- @Kimikel Hi, I have addressed the green comments. On the first "Background" comment, I decided to do a semicolon instead of a period due to the lack of flow when the sentence had a full stop. On the Verifiability comments, I might try to replace the refs with online links, but that won't negatively nor positively affect the GA. The other Verifiability comments were addressed, except for the two comments with the Spot check. I'll get to those when I can. Conyo14 (talk) 19:31, 8 January 2025 (UTC)
- @Conyo14 Thanks for what you've done so far. Please let me know when you get a chance to address those two comments. Kimikel (talk) 13:56, 9 January 2025 (UTC)
- @Kimikel Hi, I have addressed the green comments. On the first "Background" comment, I decided to do a semicolon instead of a period due to the lack of flow when the sentence had a full stop. On the Verifiability comments, I might try to replace the refs with online links, but that won't negatively nor positively affect the GA. The other Verifiability comments were addressed, except for the two comments with the Spot check. I'll get to those when I can. Conyo14 (talk) 19:31, 8 January 2025 (UTC)
Well-written
[edit]Lead
[edit]- spectators, in controlled conditions > remove comma
Background
[edit]- zone, and the conferences remained > separate idea, break this into a new sentence
- interested in getting an NHL franchise > interested in acquiring an NHL franchise
The second century
[edit]- However they lost the series > They lost the series
- history; in their Presidents' > replace semicolon with period
- However, the team suffered > The team suffered
- However, the team subsequently rebounded > The Lightning subsequently rebounded,
- year, after a pandemic > remove comma
- The year after the Lightning's > In 2022, the year after the Lightning's
- coach, and traded > coach and traded
- Despite this, and like the 2018–19 Lightning, the Bruins suffered a first-round elimination to the Panthers, despite holding a 3–1 series lead four games into the series. > The Bruins suffered a first-round elimination to the Panthers, similarly to the 2018–19 Lightning, ding a 3–1 series lead four games into the series.
- 2014 Winter Classic > wikilink
- Then on December 16 > On December 16
- Canada commemorating > Canada, to commemorate
- A unique series > A series
- 21, 2021 at the > 21, 2021, at the
- in a unique partnership > in a partnership
- Stadium, on the campus > remove comma
- New York City, and held > remove comma
- taking place at the Cotton Bowl between the Predators and Stars. > between the Predators and Stars taking place at the Cotton Bowl in Dallas, Texas.
- But after the National Basketball Association > remove But, wikilink NBA
- Many of the logistics still have to be negotiated, including COVID-19 testing protocols, visas, and whether these games would be held in one or more "hub" cities as the Canada–United States border remains closed to non-essential travel until June 21. > This sentence is out of date
- The league also renewed its CBA > break this acronym out for people who may not know
- Smith is paying a > Smith paid a
- The Utah Hockey Club > merge this paragraph with the previous one
- season, with a temporary name and colors, while a full identity shall be developed in time for 2025–26. > season with a temporary name and colors. A full identity will be developed in time for the 2025–26 season.
Verifiability
[edit]- Are any of the sources in the Background section available online? This is definitely not a requirement for GA, but if they're not, maybe consider replacing them with online sources, since all of this information should be out there elsewhere. Again, if you don't want to, you're not obligated to.
- I don't think the quotes in footnotes 111 and 113 are necessary.
- There's some inconsistency in how sources are written/linked. Some are wikilinked; some aren't (i.e. Toronto Star, Hamilton Spectator). Sometimes they use different names (i.e. ESPN vs. ESPN.com; nhl.com vs NHL.com vs National Hockey League). I'd prefer if all sources were wikilinked and if they were written consistently throughout the references.
- Remove Associated Press as an author in 3 and 6
Spot check
[edit]- 64: Verified
- 53: Verified
- 11: Slight distinction: it doesn't say they were the second-fastest team to win the Cup; rather, the 2nd fastest Big 4 team to win a championship after the MLB's Diamondbacks.
- 17: Only goes up to his 126th point, not his 128th. recommend adding a second source that corroborates the 128 point part.
- 93: Verified.
- Probably going to do a second round later since there were a couple of minor inaccuracies here.
Neutrality, stability, broadness
[edit]- No issues. This is a pretty broad stretch of time and there are a lot of things that could be included, but I think the article is comprehensive enough and doesn't necessarily need more.
Illustrated
[edit]- Images properly licensed and beneficial to the article.