Talk:Hewitt's red rock hare/GA1

GA Review

Passed. ✿ Wolveríne X-eye ✿ 15:56, 2 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Reconrabbit (talk · contribs) 18:47, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Wolverine X-eye (talk · contribs) 13:55, 1 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Will review this now. ✿ Wolveríne X-eye ✿ 13:55, 1 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

There were only a couple things here that I didn't agree with/couldn't discern exactly what needed changing. Recon rabbit 17:57, 1 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Reconrabbit: Responded to some of your queries. ✿ Wolveríne X-eye ✿ 06:45, 2 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Hewitt's red rock hare (Pronolagus saundersiae) is a species of mammal in the family Leporidae found in South Africa, Eswatini, and Lesotho. Species of mammal is a bit broad, maybe hare?
Changed to "species of rabbit"; hares are only the species in genus Lepus.
with a preference for a higher-elevation rocky habitat Higher elevated?
Now "higher elevated". Was unsure how to best describe.
Mind linking species on first occurrence
Linked
Like other red rock hares, P. saundersiae is presumed to feed on grasses, herbs, and shrubs, and is predated upon by Verreaux's eagle, Cape eagle-owls, and leopards. The two ands are too close to each other. Perhaps replace the second "and" with a semicolon and a "it"
Split into two sentences as is done in the body
It is considered a least-concern species by the International Union for Conservation of Nature; it is considered to be "abundant" throughout its range Rm semicolon and it is and replace em with a comma and "and is said"
Changed here and in the first paragraph of Threats and interactions with humans
but is not protected by any specific conservation measures, and its population is expected to decrease due to habitat loss caused by humans. Replace "but is not" with "despite not being"
Done
and its population is expected to decrease due to habitat loss caused by humans. Start a new sentence and replace the above text with "As a result of habitat loss caused by humans, the global population is expected to decrease"
Changed to your suggestion, I tried different permutations that didn't work as well.
Can you add something about behavior and ecology in the lead
I've added nocturnality and breeding patterns to the lead in addition to the foraging and predation sentences.
He described this taxon based on skulls from Albany district, collected by Enid Saunders and Frank Bowker add "which were" before collected and after the comma
Done
; the species is named after Saunders. Replace semicolon with a full stop and start a new sentence. Also, replace "is" with "was"
Done
It was later classified as a subspecies of Pronolagus rupestris by various zoologists,[12] including Ellerman, Morrison-Scott and Hayman,[9] as well as Hoffman and Smith for the third edition of Mammal Species of the World.[6] Can you add the explanation before this
Which explanation; the current classification that immediately follows?
Yes
Moved the information around and reworded. I don't have a definitive date when the subspecies to species change gained consensus, esp. since I don't have the 2013 book; my assumption is somewhere between 2005 and 2013 but that would be OR to add
but they are never described or illustrated. Drop "they"
Done
The color of its fur varies depending on its habitat. Drop last "its"
Now "varies by habitat"
Its adult head-body length is measured between 380 ==> The head-body length measures between 380
Done
Its ear length measures 80–110 mm (3.1–4.3 in) "Its" with "the"
Done
habitat contributes to the separation of it from other red rock hares in areas of overlapping distribution. "its separation"?
"towards its separation" now
Smith's red rock hare - a You meant to use a dash?
Changed to an em dash. I always get mixed up with these.
It is presumed to be a folivore, This is a bit repetitive, can you come up with another phrase?
"It is likely a folivore"?
Known predators of P. saundersiae are to Known predators of P. saundersiae and red rock hares in general include
Done
patterns are presumed Please replace the last word
Rewrote the sentence since IUCN doesn't bother with "presumed"
with each litter yielding one to two young. The young are born altricial to with each litter yielding one to two young born altricial
Combined
However, there are several threats to the species, many of which "many of which" to "of which many"
Done
and declines in population are anticipated. This last part doesn't fit well with the sentence
Moved to the end of the paragraph, rewording to "which will cause a decline in the global population" referring to the aforementioned habitat loss
P. saundersiae is listed as a species of least concern on the By the
Done, changed wikilink
Also add the abbreviation IUCN in the lead and conservation sections
Done

Images

Please add a caption to the lead image
Added (species name and location)
Images appropriately licensed

Sources

Smith et al 2018 needs page nos.
~~Unfortunately I only have the book as an epub, which changes layout based on screen size, so there are no page numbers. Should I add quotes?~~ Never mind, the book conveniently has this specific page listed in the Google Books preview. Added.
Spot checks on 5 sources
- 19 OK
- 21 OK
- 8 OK
- 18 OK
- 1d OK but I'd suggest you use synonyms
  Referring to "presumed"?
  Precisely
  Change made in respect to previous comments

Broadness

Found nothing

Assessment

@Reconrabbit: I'm pleased to inform you that I've completed my review of this article. The list I put forth includes all issues I'd like to see fixed. And when all is said and done, I'd appreciate a review of one of my articles. Of course, that's completely voluntary and all up to you. ✿ Wolveríne X-eye ✿ 15:44, 1 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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