Talk:Heinz Schnabel and Harry Wappler escape attempt/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Buidhe (talk · contribs) 18:31, 12 February 2020 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

• daring, but ultimately unsuccessful "daring" is an opinion and shouldn't be stated in Wikipedia voice, see WP:EDITORIALIZING.
  • Done.
• I would suggest "attempted to fly to the continent" in the lede and "For their daring, but ultimately unsuccessful escape attempt" in the body. In the lede, "attempted" implies it was unsuccessful and in the body it's already clear that it wasn't.
  • Done.
• neutral Eire (Ireland) Just "neutral Ireland", per WP:IRE-IRL.
  • Done.
• Holland Do you actually mean Holland? Otherwise use Netherlands, with no link per MOS:OVERLINK
  • Done.
• forced to land This implies something else; they were in control of the aircraft and decided to land.
  • Done.
• six confirmed 'kills' Should be "six enemy aircraft confirmed destroyed" or similar to avoid slang that may confuse non-experts.
  • Done.
• Henry L. deZeng IV—what makes this a reliable source? Anyone can make up a PDF and post on the web. buidhe 18:31, 12 February 2020 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure if Classic Publications is reilable, but an author search on google books shows he's writen published books on the subject. L293D (☎ • ✎) 15:22, 14 February 2020 (UTC)
    • According to Worldcat the other publications were under "Midland", which like Classic is an imprint of Crecy Publishing. This does not convince me that any of them are RS. buidhe 15:48, 14 February 2020 (UTC)
      • Yeah, unfortunate, but you're right. I've removed the two sentences that were sourced by that guy. L293D (☎ • ✎) 16:15, 14 February 2020 (UTC)
• Per previous GA review, I'm not sure what the blockquote in "Harry Wappler" section is adding to the article. It doesn't seem sufficiently relevant to the escape. buidhe 15:48, 14 February 2020 (UTC)
  • Done.